Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar graph illustrate the percentage of perceived danger and actual likelihood being victim of crime in burglary,car,violent crime in the years of 2009 to 2010 and 2010 to 2011

overall,perceived danger in session of 2009 to 2010 was in the high percentage in every crime . Actual likelihood

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify the chart’s subject and name the three crime types, and you begin an overview by noting that perceived danger was high in 2009/10. However, the response stops before reporting the main comparisons: it gives no figures, does not compare perceived with actual likelihood, and says nothing about how the values changed in 2010/11. The unfinished phrase “Actual likelihood” leaves the overview incomplete, so the task is addressed only minimally. The required minimum of 150 words is not met; this also leaves too little information to summarise the chart adequately. To improve, complete an overview and select key figures, such as car crime being highest in perceived and actual likelihood, while actual rates remained much lower than perceived ones.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence introduces the chart, followed by a separate overview beginning with “overall”. This gives the reader a starting point, but there is no clear progression into comparisons or supporting details. The second paragraph ends abruptly at “Actual likelihood”, and the comma spacing in “burglary,car,violent crime” makes the list harder to read. Because the response is so brief and incomplete, links between ideas and paragraph development are largely absent. Build a clear sequence: introduce the chart, state the main overview, then compare the crime types and the two years in a final paragraph, using simple linking phrases such as “By contrast” and “In 2010/11”.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses relevant topic vocabulary, including “percentage”, “perceived danger”, “actual likelihood” and the names of the crime categories. These choices show some awareness of the chart’s subject, but the range is narrow and several phrases are imprecise or awkward, such as “in the high percentage” and “in session of 2009 to 2010”. The phrase “being victim of crime” also needs a more natural form. Since the response contains no detailed comparisons, it offers little evidence of a wider range for describing data. Practise accurate chart language, including “proportion”, “was higher than”, “fell to” and “remained stable”, and use the standard year format “2009/10”.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

You attempt a complete introductory sentence and a separate overview, but grammatical control is limited. In “The bar graph illustrate”, the singular subject requires “illustrates”; “being victim” needs an article, and “in the years of 2009 to 2010 and 2010 to 2011” is not a well-formed time expression. The second sentence is also incomplete: “Actual likelihood” has no verb or completed idea. Most of the writing relies on simple sentence patterns, so there is little evidence of a wider range of structures. Focus first on complete sentences, subject–verb agreement, articles and clear time phrases, then practise combining comparisons with clauses such as “while actual figures remained lower”.

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