Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The Given Graph illustrates the data about crimes in different years. It demonstrates and give details about three crimes in past years. The first Crime was burglary however Second one is telling us about Car Crimes and Third one showing us about violent crimes.

The Graph demonstrates that victim of burglary actually started from just 2.5% but it shows around 15% of actual crime which slightly decreased in 2009 and 2010. Further Car Crimes have secured a major portion of crime rate in 2010 which is near to 22% hence In actual it was just 4%. Apart from this Violent crimes remains 15% in 2009 and 2010 but that was just 3% in reality. If I compare these crimes with each other So Car Crimes took huge percentage in this graph with around 21% However other crimes took same percentage in actual with 15%. This is the whole data that graph is explaining us below.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the three crime categories and make a relevant broad comparison: perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation, with car crime highest in perceived terms. However, the account only partially reports the chart and contains important inaccuracies. For example, you say burglary “started from just 2.5%” and then refer to “15% of actual crime”; the chart shows perceived burglary at about 15.5% in 2009/10 and 13% in 2010/11, while actual figures are about 2% and 2.5%. You also describe violent crime as remaining at 15% across both years, although its perceived figure falls from about 15.5% to 13.5%. Include a clear overview and accurately compare both years and both measures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has some organisation: it introduces the chart, discusses the crime types, and uses linking expressions such as “Further,” “Apart from this,” and “If I compare.” These help signal relationships between points. However, the progression is not consistently clear, and the opening repeats the task rather than presenting the main pattern. The discussion moves between perceived and actual figures without clearly distinguishing the two series, which contributes to confusion. For instance, the burglary figures are combined in a way that makes it difficult to tell which year or measure is being described. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the detailed comparisons, and group figures consistently by year or by perceived versus actual likelihood.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “burglary,” “Car Crimes,” “violent crimes,” “percentage,” and “in reality,” so the reader can generally identify the subject. However, the range is limited and several expressions are imprecise or unnatural for describing a chart. “The first Crime” and “the whole data that graph is explaining us” are awkward, while “secured a major portion of crime rate” does not accurately express a high perceived likelihood. Repetition of “graph demonstrates” and “crimes” also limits flexibility. Aim for precise reporting language such as “the chart compares,” “the perceived likelihood,” and “the actual rate,” and use “stood at,” “fell to,” or “was higher than” to describe values and changes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences using “however,” “hence,” and “apart from this,” but the sentence structures are often awkward and punctuation is not reliably controlled. For example, “It demonstrates and give details” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “Violent crimes remains” also needs agreement between the plural subject and verb. Tense and sentence construction are inconsistent in “The first Crime was burglary however Second one is telling us,” while several clauses run together without appropriate punctuation. These errors sometimes make the relationships between figures unclear. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then combine them with subordinate clauses, checking agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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