Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph compares the percentages of perceived danger and the becoming of actual crime in three different categories across two periods 2009/10 and 2010/11.

Overall, most of people are significantly fear about perceived danger for all three categories of crime. Car crime record the highest figures for both perceived and actual occurrence in both years.

Regarding, burglary crime the risk of perceived danger is stood at 15% in 2009/10 which slightly reduce to 13% in 2010/11. But actual burglary crime is much lower, accounting for 2% in 2009/10 which minimally rose to 3% in 2010/11.

The car crime is the most highest crime figures both in perceived and actual occurrence. It accounts for 21% in 2009/10 then it went down to 17% in 2010/11. In contrast, the actual car crime is about 4% during these years. Finally, regarding violent crime the perceived danger is about 15% for 2009/10 and 13% for 2010/11. Meanwhile, the actual percentage of crime is stay lowest between 4% to 5% .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: perceived risk is much higher than actual crime in all three categories, and car crime has the highest figures in both measures. The overview and the burglary and car-crime comparisons are supported with relevant figures. This meets the task well, while showing some of the fuller coverage expected at the next level. However, the violent-crime comparison is less precise: the perceived figure falls from about 15% to 13.5%, not 13%, and actual violent crime rises from 3% to 3.5%, rather than remaining within a broad 4–5% range. Reporting these changes accurately, and comparing the actual figures across categories more explicitly, would make the account more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by paragraphs covering burglary, car crime and violent crime. This makes the main comparisons easy to locate, and transitions such as “Overall,” “In contrast” and “Meanwhile” help connect information. Cohesion is not always smooth, however. “Regarding” is used awkwardly to begin a sentence and paragraph, and the repeated category-by-category pattern can feel mechanical. The final sentence also gives a broad range rather than clearly linking the actual violent-crime figures to their year-by-year change. Use more precise links between perceived and actual data, and make sure each paragraph develops a clear comparison rather than simply listing figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “percentages,” “perceived danger,” “actual occurrence” and “figures,” so the topic remains understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “the becoming of actual crime,” “most of people are significantly fear,” “record the highest figures,” and “the most highest crime figures” are examples. Some repetition of “crime” and “figures” also narrows the range. Aim for natural, precise expressions such as “actual crime rates,” “most people are significantly more concerned,” and “recorded the highest percentages.” A wider set of accurate terms for increases, decreases and comparisons would help you describe the data more fluently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “which” and contrast introduced by “In contrast” and “Meanwhile.” The overall meaning is generally recoverable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “the risk … is stood at” has an incorrect verb construction, “which slightly reduce” does not agree with its subject and uses the wrong tense, and “the actual percentage of crime is stay” has an incorrect verb form. There are also problems with articles and sentence construction in “most of people” and “the most highest.” Work on consistent past-tense reporting, subject–verb agreement and complete verb phrases. More accurate control of these patterns would make your range of sentence structures clearer.

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