Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given bar chart shows information about perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime, by crime type. The chart shows three various types of crime type i.e, burglary, car crime and violent crime from year 2009 to 2011.

According to the bar chart, the majority of perceived crime type is car crime of year 2009/10 (21%) following it the other two types of perceived crime shows same % (15%) in the same timeline. The perceived crimes in the year 2010/11 got a little reduced but the burglary and violent crime bars were still identical to eachother.

The actual crimes were significantly lower with respect to perceived crimes. Car crimes were still leading with almost 5%, while burglary and violent crimes shows similar %.

In conclusion, the % of perceived crimes are far more greater than the actual crimes. The car crimes showing the substancial % while burglary and violent crimes showing almost similar percentages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and report several key comparisons: perceived likelihood is much higher than actual likelihood, car crime is highest, and perceived burglary and violent crime are similar. However, the account is incomplete: it gives no clear figures for actual burglary or violent crime and only says perceived figures “got a little reduced,” without reporting the 2010/11 values or comparing the changes across categories. The conclusion repeats earlier points rather than adding a fuller overview. Also, the response is 144 words, below the 150-word minimum; 13 words copied from the prompt were not counted. Include a concise overview and support it with accurate figures for both years and both measures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to perceived figures, actual figures and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression is limited because the body paragraphs do not systematically compare the two years or distinguish clearly between all crime types. Linking phrases such as “According to the bar chart” and “In conclusion” are repetitive or formulaic, while “following it” makes the relationship between the figures less clear. The final paragraph largely repeats the earlier claim that perceived figures are higher. Grouping the data more deliberately—for example, perceived figures first and actual figures second, with direct year-to-year comparisons—would make the organisation clearer and cohesion less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual,” “likelihood,” and “significantly lower,” so the main comparisons are understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or awkward, such as “three various types of crime type,” “the majority of perceived crime type,” and “the substancial %.” Repetition of “crime,” “showing,” and “similar %” also makes the description less precise. Spelling errors such as “substancial” and “eachother” are noticeable. Aim for concise, accurate collocations and vary the language used to describe proportions and changes; for example, state that perceived figures declined between the two periods rather than saying they “got a little reduced.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response uses mostly short, simple sentences, with a few attempts to combine ideas. Errors are frequent enough to make some sentences awkward or unclear. For example, “the majority of perceived crime type is car crime of year 2009/10” has problems with sentence structure and articles, while “the other two types of perceived crime shows same %” has subject–verb agreement and article errors. In “burglary and violent crimes showing almost similar percentages,” the final clause is not a complete sentence. There is also inconsistent tense and number marking. Practise forming complete sentences with accurate subjects and verbs, and use a wider range of controlled structures to compare the figures.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.