Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustrates the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime with 3 types of crimes burglary , car crime , violent crime .

overall , car crime trend was the highest , whereas burglary is the lowest trend compared with it

looking for the details , 2009/10 car crime increased slightly and peaked at 22 % and then decreased little in 2010/11 at 17% , meanwhile burglary is the lowest trend and reached 13% in 2010/11 conversely in 2009/10 was rose aggresively at 16% .

meanwhile , violent crime trend was dropping slightly and peaked at 16% in 2009/10 and 13% in 2010/11 so car crime surpassed them ' but also in violent trend had equal between 2010/11 booth of them peaked at 2% , and about car crime surpassed them at 4% , and burglary was lower than car crime trend and decreased about 3% in 2010/11

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s three crime types and make a relevant broad comparison: car crime is highest and burglary is generally lowest. You also report several approximate perceived figures and note that perceived risk fell from 2009/10 to 2010/11. However, the account is incomplete and some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear. Most importantly, the actual-likelihood figures are confused: the actual rates are around 2–4.5%, not equal at 2% for two crimes, and car crime remains highest in both years. The overview also does not clearly distinguish perceived from actual likelihood. The response is 141 words, below the 150-word minimum. To improve, give a clear overview of the large gap between perception and actual rates, then compare both series accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: an opening identifies the chart, a separate overview gives a general comparison, and later paragraphs attempt to describe details. Linking expressions such as “whereas,” “meanwhile” and “conversely” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because perceived and actual figures are mixed together, and the final paragraph shifts between crime types without a clear sequence. Some connectors do not express the intended relationship, while repeated references to “trend” make the links less precise. Organise the details consistently—for example, describe perceived figures for both years first, then actual figures—and use clear comparisons such as “by contrast” only when the data support them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual likelihood,” “peaked,” “decreased” and “surpassed,” so the reader can recognise the intended topic. However, the range is limited and several choices are repetitive or imprecise. “Trend” is repeatedly used where “rate” or “figure” would be clearer, and phrases such as “increased slightly” do not accurately describe a comparison between the two years. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “aggresively” and “booth,” which reduce clarity. Build a more precise set of terms for describing percentages and comparisons, and check spelling before submitting. Avoid using “peak” for a value that simply represents a category’s figure.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences joined with words such as “whereas,” “and then” and “conversely.” This shows some effort to vary sentence structure. However, the longer sentences are often difficult to control, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation occur frequently. For example, “burglary … reached 13% … conversely in 2009/10 was rose” has an incomplete and incorrect verb construction, while “violent crime trend was dropping” lacks clear grammatical framing. Capitalisation and comma spacing are also inconsistent. Use shorter, complete sentences when comparing figures, and check that each clause has a subject and correctly formed verb. Practising past-tense reporting structures such as “the figure fell from … to …” would improve accuracy.

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