Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph illustrates the perceived danger and real likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Overall,the perceived normally involves in burglary crime.And actual not involve in burglary crime.However, in car crime perceived significantly involved.And actual gradually involve in car crime.So,the perceived increased involve in vioilent crime.And actual normally involved in vioilent crime.

Intially,in Burglary perceived involves in likelihood of being a victime 15% in 2009.And Actual 3% in 2009.Therefore,Perceived in 2010,13% involved.This figure declined.However,in car crime,perceived involve 21% in 2009.And actual 4% in 2009.However,perceived in 2010,17% involved.And Actual in 2010,4% involved.So,this figure normally dropped.

Secondly,Vioient crime,perceived involved 15% in 2009.And actual 2% involve.So,the perceived in 2010,13% involved.And actual in 2010,3% involved.Therefore,this figure decreased.

In conclusion,the burglary in 2009 approximately raises.And in 2010 significantly decreased.So,in car crime,perceived in 2009 significantly boost and in 2010 perceived slowly declined.So,actual in 2009 and in 2010 remain stable.However,in vioient crime same stabalize in the car crime.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and make some relevant comparisons, including that perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation and that perceived car crime is highest. You also report several approximate figures. However, the overview is unclear and sometimes contradicts the data: “perceived normally involves in burglary crime” does not describe the overall pattern, and the chart shows perceived risk falling across all three crimes, while actual rates rise slightly for burglary and violent crime and remain level for car crime. Some details are missing or inaccurate, such as the 2010/11 actual burglary figure and the 2009/10 violent-crime figure. Focus the overview on the large perception–reality gap and the broad changes, then report the figures consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has separate opening, overview, detail paragraphs and a conclusion, and it groups information by crime type, giving the reader some organisation. However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview and conclusion repeat or conflict with details, and the repeated “However,” “So,” and “Therefore” do not always show a clear relationship between ideas. For example, “this figure decreased” is ambiguous: it is not clear whether it refers to perceived or actual risk. The conclusion also introduces claims about figures “rais[ing]” or remaining stable without clearly identifying the series. Use a consistent structure—overview first, then comparisons by crime type—and name the series when describing each change.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant terms, including “perceived,” “actual,” “likelihood,” “declined” and “stable,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, vocabulary is limited and repetitive, and several word combinations are unnatural or obscure the intended meaning: “perceived involved,” “actual normally involved,” and “significantly boost.” There are also spelling errors such as “vioilent,” “Intially,” “victime” and “stabalize.” These issues make the description less precise, especially when distinguishing perceived risk from actual victimisation. Build a small set of accurate chart-description phrases and use them consistently, such as “the perceived risk of burglary fell” and “the actual rate remained unchanged.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas with clauses and use past-time references, but sentence structures are mostly short and repetitive, and many contain errors that make relationships difficult to understand. Examples include “Overall,the perceived normally involves in burglary crime” and “And actual gradually involve in car crime,” where the subject–verb pattern and verb forms are faulty. Tense and agreement are inconsistent, as in “the burglary in 2009 approximately raises” and “actual … remain stable.” Punctuation is also frequently missing after introductory words and around sentence boundaries. Practise complete subject–verb sentences, using past forms for the chart period, and check articles and punctuation. For example: “Perceived burglary risk fell from about 15.5% to 13%.”

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