Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar graph illustrate the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime there is a three type of criminal name as Burglary, car crime and volent crime between in 2009/10 and 2010/10.

In overall, it is clear that people wer more worries about becoming victim of crime than the actual figures showed. Car crime had the highest percentage, while Burglary had the lowest actual rate.

In 2009/10, Burglary had about 15% in perceived rate ,while the actural figure was only 2% but in 2010/11 it is gradully fall about 13% and actual was about same rate. Similary, car crime is the highest proportion about 21% of crime in 2009/10 and its actual rate was 4% but in 2010/11 the percentage was fall about 16% and than actual likehood was only 4%.

Volent crime is the danger and harmful crime In 2009/10, about 15% in perceived but it is slightly lower in 2010/11, about 13%. The actual figure was very low in both years, at around 3% .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main contrast accurately: perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation, and car crime is generally the highest while burglary has the lowest actual rate. The overview also notes that perceived figures decline in 2010/11. However, some details are incomplete or imprecise. For example, you say car crime’s perceived figure fell to “about 16%,” whereas the chart indicates approximately 17%, and you do not report the small increases in actual rates for burglary and violent crime. The opening also gives the period as “2010/10,” which does not match the chart. To strengthen the response, compare all three categories consistently across both years and distinguish perceived from actual figures more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the crime categories. This helps the reader follow the broad comparison, and linking expressions such as “while,” “Similarly,” and “but” show attempts to connect related information. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is sometimes unclear because figures and years are joined in long, loosely controlled sentences. The burglary and car-crime comparisons are presented in a similar pattern, but the violent-crime paragraph does not clearly state its actual figures for each year. Some transitions, including “than actual likelihood,” are difficult to interpret. Use shorter, parallel comparisons for each crime type and make the relationship between each year and its perceived and actual values explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual rate,” “percentage,” and “highest proportion,” so the reader can understand the topic and the main comparisons. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “volent,” “actural,” “likehood,” and “wer more worries” are examples. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “three type of criminal name” and “the percentage was fall.” These issues sometimes make the intended meaning less clear, even though the overall message remains understandable. Build a reliable set of chart-description collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully; use terms such as “crime types,” “the figure fell,” and “people were more concerned.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including comparisons with “while” and “but,” and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, control is inconsistent, and complex sentences often contain several errors. The opening lacks a clear sentence boundary between “crime” and “there,” while “Car crime is the highest proportion” has an inaccurate grammatical construction. Verb forms and agreement are also problematic in “the percentage was fall” and “people wer more worries.” Articles and sentence punctuation are sometimes missing or misplaced. Practise building accurate comparison sentences with a clear subject and verb—for example, “The perceived figure for burglary fell, while the actual rate rose slightly”—before combining several figures in one sentence.

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