Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart compares the perceived risk of becoming a victim of crime with the actual likelihood of happening three different crime in 2009/10 and 2010/11. Overall, the perception of being a victim was considerably higher for all three crimes in both the periods, whereas the committing of crime was far lower. Car crime was considered the greatest threat, while the perceived risk for all three crimes declined in 2010/11.

In 2009/10, approximately 21% of people believed to become the victim of car crime. making the highest figure on the chart. This proportion fell noticeably to 17% in 2010/11. However, the actual happened of crime remained stable in both years at 4%.

A similar pattern was seemed to be followed by burglary and violent crime. In 2009/10, both crimes perceived to stood at 15%, before decreasing to 13% in the following year. In contrast, actually happened of crimes were significantly lower, ranging between 2.5% to 3%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the chart’s main contrast clearly: perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation for all three crimes, and perceived figures fall in 2010/11. You also correctly identify car crime as the highest perceived threat and give its approximate figures of 21% and 17%. The comparison of burglary and violent crime is broadly accurate, but saying both were about 15% before falling to 13% overlooks that violent crime was approximately 13.5% in 2010/11. The actual figures are also compressed into a range, so the small increases for burglary and violent crime are not reported, while car crime’s actual rate is described as stable. Overall, the key features are covered, though some comparisons are generalised or imprecise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response has a clear overall progression: an introduction and overview are followed by a paragraph on car crime and one on burglary and violent crime. This makes the main comparisons easy to locate, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “However,” and “In contrast” help signal relationships between ideas. The organisation is effective, but the final paragraph groups two crimes together without clearly distinguishing their actual figures or their slightly different trends. The transition “A similar pattern” is also not fully precise, since the perceived figures are similar but the actual rates differ and rise modestly. To strengthen cohesion further, use references that specify which series or crime is being discussed and connect each comparison directly to its data.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of task-related vocabulary, including “perceived risk,” “actual likelihood,” “considered the greatest threat,” and “declined.” These choices communicate the main comparisons and show some flexibility beyond basic description. However, several word combinations and forms are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “actual happened of crime,” “the committing of crime,” and “both crimes perceived to stood.” These reduce precision even though the intended meaning is generally recoverable. Aim for standard chart-description collocations, such as “actual victimisation rate,” “the proportion who perceived a risk,” and “the figures for burglary and violent crime stood at.” This would make your vocabulary more natural and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of sentence forms, including a complex overview with “whereas” and comparisons introduced by “before” and “in contrast.” However, errors in verb forms, sentence boundaries, and grammatical patterns are noticeable. For example, “three different crime” needs a plural noun, “people believed to become” lacks a suitable verb construction, and “making the highest figure on the chart” is left as a sentence fragment after a full stop. The phrase “both crimes perceived to stood” also combines incompatible verb forms. These problems sometimes make the reader work to interpret the sentence, although the overall message remains understandable. Practise complete sentence structures and accurate past-tense reporting, especially with verbs such as “believe,” “stand,” and “fall.”

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