Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illutrates Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime by their type .

Overall, there are three types of crimes that are Burglary , Car crime and Violent crime and also mention two different typer of years that are 2009/10 and 2010/11 . This chart gives the information of Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime. It is clear that the both perceived are higher than both actual .

Firstly, the burglary crime in 2009/10 is aproximatly 16 and in 2010/11 is approximatly 13 percent but the actual crime is only 2 to 3 percent in both years .It is clearly seen that percrived ratio is higher than actual .

Secondly, the car crime is larger in percentage than others like burglary and violent crime . Its perceived ratio is aproximatly 22 percent in 2009/10 and 17 percent in 2010/11 but in actual they are almost same that is almost 4%. The violent crime is around 15 % in perceived 2009/10 and round about 17 % in perceived 2010/11 but actually they are almsot same in ratio in both years that is 4 percent .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all three crime types and both periods, and your overview correctly identifies that perceived likelihood is much higher than actual likelihood. You also report the main pattern for burglary and car crime: perceived figures fall from 2009/10 to 2010/11, while actual figures remain low. Some details are less fully or accurately reported, however. For violent crime, the perceived figure is about 15.5% in 2009/10 and 13.5% in 2010/11, so it decreases rather than rising to around 17%. The actual figures are about 3% and 3.5%, not 4% in both years. A more precise overview comparing the highest category and the changes across all series would strengthen the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction and overview are followed by paragraphs beginning “Firstly” and “Secondly.” This helps the reader follow the categories, and the comparisons between perceived and actual figures provide some progression. However, the overview repeats the task description rather than selecting the most important patterns, and the final paragraph combines car and violent crime, making the comparison less clear. Linking phrases such as “It is clearly seen” recur without adding much information, while some references, including “they” in the car-crime discussion, are not fully clear. Grouping the two perceived series together and then the actual series, or giving each crime type a distinct comparison, would create a more consistent progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual,” “percentage,” and “ratio,” so the reader can understand the subject and the main comparisons. However, the range is limited and several choices are imprecise or repetitive. “The car crime is larger in percentage” is an awkward way to describe a higher figure, and “actual crime” can suggest crime incidence rather than the chart’s actual likelihood. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “illutrates,” “aproximatly,” “percrived,” and “almsot,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for precise reporting language and check spelling carefully; alternatives such as “stood at,” “declined,” and “remained broadly stable” would help describe the data more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the overall meaning is generally recoverable. However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence construction, articles, agreement, and punctuation are frequent enough to make some passages awkward. For example, “Overall, there are three types of crimes that are…” is an unnatural construction, while “It is clear that the both perceived are higher” has an incorrect article and an incomplete noun phrase. Several sentences also run together, as in the burglary comparison, where a full stop is missing before “It is clearly seen.” Practise building clear comparison sentences with accurate articles and plural forms, and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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