Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Summit Mastery · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the perceived danger and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Perceived and actual likelihood of being a victim of crime: by crime type

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar graph represents the perceived obstacles and reality of being a victim of crime.

Overall, we can see a huge differences in perceived is higher and actual victims is lowest in all three areas such as Burglary, Car crime and Violent crime.

Looking in to the figure of bar graph, 15% is expected in 2009/10 but, the actual is around 3%. Similarly, in 2010/11 as perceived is 12% and actual is also around 3%. On the ther hand, car crime is highly expected near 21% but happen only as 4.5%. Likewise, in 2010/11, the expected is 17% but happen only 4.5%.

Turning towards in to the figure of bar graph, violent crime is expected as 15% in 2009/10 but only happen around 3% and in the 2010/11, the pereived is 14% and the actual is 4%. In the end, all the actual is under 5%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s central contrast: perceived risk is much higher than actual victimisation in all three crime categories, and you include figures for both periods. The comparisons for car crime and violent crime are mostly close to the chart, although burglary’s perceived figure in 2010/11 is about 13%, rather than 12%. Your overview is present but vague: “a huge differences” does not clearly summarise the overall pattern that perceived risk fell between years while actual rates changed only slightly. The response also ends at 146 words, below the required 150. To develop the task more fully, state the main trend clearly and report the small year-to-year changes accurately, while avoiding claims such as “expected” when you mean perceived likelihood.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, moving from an introduction and overview to figures for burglary and car crime, then violent crime. This makes the information reasonably easy to follow. However, progression is weakened by repetitive framing: “Looking in to the figure of bar graph” and “Turning towards in to the figure of bar graph” perform the same function, while “On the ther hand” does not introduce a clear contrast. The overview is also difficult to interpret, so it does not effectively guide the reader through the details. Use a clearer overview, group comparisons by year or by perceived versus actual rates, and use linking phrases only when they express a genuine relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “perceived,” “actual,” “Burglary,” “Car crime” and “Violent crime,” so the reader can identify the chart categories. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural. “Obstacles” does not describe the likelihood of crime, and “expected” is less precise than “perceived” in this context. Phrases such as “actual victims is lowest” and “happen only as 4.5%” also make the meaning less natural. There are spelling errors, including “ther” and “pereived.” Aim for precise chart language and natural collocations, such as “the perceived risk was higher” and “the actual rate stood at.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, but the range is limited and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences awkward. For example, “we can see a huge differences” has an article and agreement problem, while “perceived is higher and actual victims is lowest” lacks a clear grammatical structure. In “15% is expected in 2009/10 but, the actual is around 3%,” the passive form and punctuation are not controlled. The repeated pattern “is … but happen only” also uses an incorrect verb form. Practise complete comparison structures, such as “The perceived figure was 15%, whereas the actual rate was about 3%,” and check subject–verb agreement, articles and tense.

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