Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In this bar charts illustrates a record of earning ammount of proporation of one nation across varity of products.Data comparision of two years 2015 and 2016.Given indivsual percentage changed between two years.Figure mention in billions.

Overall, in 2016 all export products earnings were slightly move up side compair to past year 2015. just not applicabal in gems and jewellery sector, it's slightly downward.

Petroleum products and Engineered products has largely contribute in export earning, values arround six billions which also incressed by sequencly three three % and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart as comparing export earnings in 2015 and 2016 and give a relevant overview that most categories rose while gems and jewellery fell. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: it ends mid-sentence and gives almost no usable detail about the figures or the main comparisons. The statement that petroleum and engineered goods were “arround six billions” is inaccurate; their earnings were about $61–63 billion and $57–62 billion. You also say all categories except gems rose, although agricultural products were essentially unchanged at about $31 billion. The response is 87 words, below the required 150. To improve, complete the report and select key values and changes accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening identifies the chart, a separate paragraph gives an overview, and the final paragraph begins a comparison of the leading categories. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, progression is limited because the report stops partway through a sentence, and the main comparisons are not developed. The opening also consists of disconnected fragments, such as “Data comparision of two years 2015 and 2016,” while “just not applicabal” does not clearly connect the exception to the overview. Use complete sentences, organise the report into an introduction, overview and detail paragraphs, and use clear links to compare categories and years.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “export,” “earnings,” “percentage changed,” and “downward,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is basic and several spelling, word-form and collocation errors make the meaning difficult to follow: “ammount,” “proporation,” “varity,” “compair,” and “incressed.” Phrases such as “move up side” and “values arround six billions” are not natural or precise ways to describe the data. Aim for accurate chart language and check spelling carefully. For example, describe values as “rose to around $63 billion” and use “percentage change” rather than “percentage changed.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to communicate comparisons across two years, but grammatical control is weak and the response relies on incomplete or faulty sentence forms. “In this bar charts illustrates” combines an incorrect subject structure with a plural noun, while “Data comparision of two years 2015 and 2016” is a sentence fragment. In “Petroleum products and Engineered products has largely contribute,” the subject–verb agreement and verb form are incorrect, and the final sentence is unfinished after “three three % and.” These problems frequently interrupt the reader’s understanding. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, checking agreement and tense, and using punctuation to separate the introduction, overview and comparisons.

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