Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar graph represents the numbers in 2015 and 2016 of one country's exports in different fields. In compared with 2015 in 2016 percentage differs in every category of exports. Textile were the lowest in 2015 and Petroleum products were in highest in 2016.
In the given graph the data shows pertroleum products were almost equal around 60 to c in both years however tjere were a slight difference in Engineered goods in both years in 2015 it was about 58 billions $ and in 2016 it was around 62 billins $.
The chart also illustrates the vlaue of gems and jewellery in 2015 & 2016. It was almost 51 billions $ in 2015 and 50 Billions dollars in 2016. Agriculture products were almost equal in both years around the value of 40 billions $.
The textiles were 35 billions $ in 2015 and 40 billions $ in 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response identifies the chart as export data and makes a limited attempt to compare the two years, but it does not provide a reliable summary of the main features. Several figures conflict substantially with the visual: gems and jewellery are reported as about 51 and 50 billion dollars, whereas the chart shows approximately 43 and 41; agricultural products are described as around 40, rather than about 31; and textiles are given as 35 and 40, rather than about 26 and 31. The overview is also unclear: textiles were the lowest category in 2015, but petroleum products—not textiles—were highest in 2016. The response is one word below the required minimum. To improve, give an accurate overview of the main rises and fall, then support it with correctly selected figures.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has some basic organisation: it begins with an introduction, then discusses several categories in separate paragraphs. This makes the general topic and year-to-year comparison identifiable. However, there is no clear overall progression from a concise overview to well-selected details, and the final paragraph on textiles is isolated rather than integrated into a systematic comparison. Linking is limited, with repeated openings such as “The chart also illustrates” and “The textiles were.” The phrase “In compared with 2015 in 2016” does not clearly connect the ideas. Organise the report into an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and detail paragraphs that group categories logically; use clear comparisons such as “while” and “by contrast” where they help the reader follow the data.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary is sufficient to identify the subject and some categories, using terms such as “exports,” “percentage,” “Engineered goods,” and “gems and jewellery.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or spelling errors reduce clarity, including “numbers” for export values, “fields” for categories, “pertroleum,” “vlaue,” and “billins.” “Percentage differs” is also an imprecise way to describe changes in export values. Aim for accurate, task-specific expressions such as “export earnings,” “product categories,” “rose,” “fell,” and “remained stable.” Check spelling carefully, and use “approximately” or “stood at” to report figures more naturally and precisely.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response uses mostly simple sentence patterns, with a few attempts to combine information using “however.” Meaning is generally recoverable, but grammatical errors occur throughout. For example, “In compared with 2015 in 2016 percentage differs” has an incorrect comparison structure and tense; “Textile were the lowest” has a subject–verb agreement error; and “in 2015 it was about 58 billions $” has problems with number agreement and sentence punctuation. The opening sentence also uses “the numbers” where the intended meaning is not expressed clearly. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and comparison structures, such as “Compared with 2015, the figure rose in 2016,” and check agreement, articles, plural forms, and punctuation when editing.
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