Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The given bar graph illustrates the information about the number of exports of one country. This is depicted for the time period of 2015 and 2016.

The percentage of each category that was exported is represented. The various categories include petroleum products, engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural products and textiles. In both years 2015 and 2016, petroleum was the most highly exported material. Overall, all goods recorded increasing demand in 2016 except gems and jewellery. By analysing, textile goods had the most profit of 15.24%, while there was a loss of 5.18% in exporting gems and jewellery.

In 2015, most of the export earnings came from materials like fuel, gas, petrol, etc. It had around 60 billion dollars of income. After that, engine resources contributed more than 65 billion dollars of money. Precious substances like gems and jewellery give approximately 55 billion dollars of export revenue. Agricultural products were not worth enough to provide more than 40 billion dollars. Last but not least, the lowest investment in the export of textile goods was only 35 billion dollars.

In 2016, petroleum products and engine parts had nearly equal earnings. It was around 65 billion dollars. There was a marked decrease of about 5.18% in precious ornaments and related materials. There was not a huge difference in the export demand for agricultural exports in both years. Only a 0.81% decrease was noted in 2016. Lastly, clothing goods had the highest increase of 15.24% in export value.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response7.0
Coherence and Cohesion7.5
Lexical Resource6.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy7.0
Overall7.0

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features and providing relevant comparisons. You successfully highlighted the overall trends and included specific data points for both years. However, the analysis could be improved by ensuring the data is presented more accurately; for instance, you mention 'petroleum was the most highly exported material' in 2015, but the data shows 'Engineered goods' were higher. Additionally, ensure that the distinction between the 'value' of exports and 'percentage change' is consistently clear. The overview is present, but it could be more concise to better highlight the most significant trends at the start.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The response is logically organized into clear paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on 2015 and 2016 respectively. The progression of ideas is generally clear. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In 2015', 'In 2016', and 'Lastly', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are a bit mechanical, and the referencing could be smoother. For example, the sentence 'It was around 65 billion dollars' is slightly ambiguous as it refers back to two categories simultaneously. Improving the variety of linking words would enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'export earnings', 'revenue', and 'percentage change'. There are some instances of slightly imprecise word choice, such as 'engine resources' instead of 'engineered goods' and 'precious ornaments' instead of 'gems and jewellery'. While these do not impede communication, they show a lack of precision in technical terminology. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points, but incorporating more sophisticated collocations related to data description would help elevate the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'Agricultural products were not worth enough to provide more than 40 billion dollars' (which is slightly awkward) and 'The given bar graph illustrates the information about the number of exports' (where 'value' would be more accurate than 'number'). Punctuation is generally correct, and the errors present do not cause difficulty for the reader. To reach a higher band, focus on increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences and refining subject-verb agreement.

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