Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In given paragraph petroleum products get increase to 8.5 percentage . This also increase minor in jewels and gems . Petroleum change slightly effect price more in 2016 like in 2015 price was 30 billion but in 2016 price goes simply to 60 billion which give benefit to owner of petroleum ALSO Engine goods in 2015 was 30 billion but by increase of petroleum it also reach to 60 billion which is higher and much good for selling engine . Agricultural products profit reach 10 percent it don't give more benefit . Price go from 30 to 40 billion in 2015 to 2016 which is not more than petroleum an engine . Textiles in 2015 give 30 billion profit but in 2016 it go above on 50 billion . in conclusion petroleum was only who give more benefits while engine was on second who give more earning . Petroleum only give high range and profit than others .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear overview or a structured summary of the data. While some figures are mentioned, the interpretation is often inaccurate or confusing (e.g., claiming petroleum and engine goods both reached 60 billion, which is not supported by standard data interpretation). The response lacks a clear selection of main features and fails to make meaningful comparisons. The information is presented in a fragmented way, and the lack of a clear structure makes it difficult to follow the trends. To improve, you must focus on identifying the most significant changes and grouping the data logically rather than listing individual figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay lacks paragraphing, which is essential for organizing information in Task 1. The flow of ideas is disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often misused (e.g., 'ALSO' used in the middle of a sentence). There is no clear progression of ideas; the text jumps between categories without a logical sequence. To improve, you should organize your response into an introduction, an overview paragraph, and two body paragraphs. Use transition words like 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' or 'Similarly' to connect your ideas more effectively and improve the overall readability of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic words like 'increase,' 'price,' and 'benefit' without variation. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'much good for selling engine' and 'petroleum was only who give more benefits.' These errors occasionally make the meaning unclear. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary, including synonyms and more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'surged,' 'fluctuated,' 'remained stable,' or 'accounted for.' Focus on using words that accurately describe trends and proportions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'petroleum products get increase'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often faulty or lack proper punctuation. For example, 'Petroleum change slightly effect price more' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring consistent verb tenses when describing past data, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions. Proofreading for basic errors will also help improve your score.
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