Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In the year 2015 to 2016 the export of the one country the value of things that export from other country in various categories the percentage show in the graph the category of export is petroleum, engin oil, agricultural products, jewellery and textile.
In 2015 earned petroleum is reached about 65% and after that in the next year 2016 the earning piont increased slightly from the previous year 2015 in addition to, the textiles
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. The content is severely underdeveloped; it only touches upon two categories (petroleum and textiles) and fails to provide a comprehensive summary of the data provided in the table. The main features and comparisons are largely absent, and the information presented is fragmented and incomplete. To improve, you must ensure you cover all categories listed in the prompt and provide a clear overview of the trends, including both increases and decreases, while meeting the minimum length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks a clear logical structure. While there is a basic attempt to introduce the topic and describe a category, the progression of ideas is disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences or ideas, making the text difficult to follow. The paragraphing is also insufficient for an academic report. To improve, you should use linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'furthermore' to connect your points and ensure each paragraph has a clear focus, such as an overview, a description of increases, and a description of decreases.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. Phrases such as 'the value of things that export' and 'earning point' are imprecise and do not demonstrate the range required for an academic task. There are also issues with word choice, such as using 'earned' instead of 'revenue' or 'value'. To improve, you should learn topic-specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'witnessed a rise', 'accounted for', and 'remained stable'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you describe the data more accurately and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. Sentence structures are often incomplete or run-on, such as 'In the year 2015 to 2016 the export of the one country the value of things that export from other country...'. There is a lack of control over basic sentence construction, verb tenses, and prepositions. To improve, focus on writing complete, simple sentences first before attempting complex structures. Pay close attention to subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions in an academic context.
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