Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The illustrates that the export in country various years . The export of petroleum product in 2015 is 6 billion dollars as one year later export is increase more than 6 billion dollars the petroleum export was more than the other products. In first years the engineered goods is less than second year about 6 billion dollars as the other export product was to decrease . In last the textile product export is down to decrease then the product . The petroleum in two years the increase to 3 percent while as the engineered product was more than the product . The gems and jewellery was 5.18 percent was less export compared to other product . The agriculture product was 0.18 percent was to increase and the textile product to about 15.24 percent was less then to all product so the textile product less exported product as compared to product
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to clearly present the data provided in the table. While it mentions several categories, the information is often inaccurate or confusingly presented. For example, the claim that petroleum exports increased by 3 percent is not clearly linked to the data, and the description of textile exports is repetitive and lacks clarity. The response lacks a clear overview, which is essential for Task 1. Many figures are mentioned without context, making it difficult for the reader to understand the trends or comparisons. To improve, you must focus on identifying the most significant changes and grouping data logically rather than listing numbers in a disjointed manner.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical organization. There is no paragraph structure, and the sentences do not flow into one another. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often misused, such as 'In first years' and 'In last', which do not effectively signal the progression of time or ideas. The lack of clear referencing makes it difficult to follow which data points are being compared. To improve, you should organize your report into distinct paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and two body paragraphs detailing specific data points. Use linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', and 'subsequently' to connect your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and often repetitive. Phrases like 'export is increase' and 'product was to decrease' are grammatically incorrect and demonstrate a limited range of expression. There is a lack of precise terminology needed to describe statistical data, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a significant decline'. The repetition of the word 'product' throughout the text indicates a restricted vocabulary. You should focus on learning collocations related to data reporting, such as 'a marginal increase', 'a substantial rise', or 'a downward trend', to improve your ability to describe the provided information accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. For example, 'The illustrates that the export in country various years' is an incomplete and ungrammatical opening. Many sentences are fragmented or lack the necessary articles and prepositions to be coherent. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, you must practice basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and work on using accurate verb tenses when describing past data.
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