Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph below shows the value of various exports of a particular country during 2015 and 2016.The exports consists of different products which includes Petroleum products, Engineered goods, Gems and jewellery, Agriculture products and that of Textiles.The Petroleum and Engineered goods are the exports which are generating the most amount of money for the country.If we compare the difference in export value between the year 2015 and 2016, some exports like Textiles and Petroleum products saw a significant growth for as high as 15.24% while the demand for Gems and jewellery saw a decline of around 5.18%. Agriculture products saw a growth of 0.8% which is not a significant growth but still it is a good news for the country's economy.Now lets talk about the revenue generated, Petroleum and Engineered products each generated a total of $65 to $70 billion dollars in each export year.Gems and jewellery generated around $50 billion dollars while agriculture and textiles each generated $30 to $40 billion dollars in each export year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, such as the highest earners and the percentage changes. However, the report lacks a clear overview or summary paragraph, which is essential for a Band 7 or higher. The data presentation is somewhat informal, and the analysis of the figures is slightly imprecise; for instance, stating that products generated '$65 to $70 billion' in 'each export year' is confusing, as the table provides specific values for 2015 and 2016 rather than a range. To improve, ensure you clearly separate the overview from the detailed data points and avoid conversational phrases like 'Now lets talk about'.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is written as a single block of text, which significantly hinders readability and logical progression. Paragraphing is a fundamental requirement for IELTS Task 1. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices (e.g., 'If we compare', 'Now lets talk about'), the flow is mechanical and the lack of paragraph breaks makes it difficult for the reader to distinguish between the introduction, the overview, and the supporting details. Using clear paragraphing to separate the overview from the body paragraphs would greatly improve the structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. Phrases like 'generating the most amount of money' and 'it is a good news' are slightly unnatural or grammatically imprecise. The student relies on basic descriptors and repeats the word 'generated' multiple times. To reach a higher band, the student should incorporate more precise terminology related to data reporting, such as 'accounted for', 'experienced a marginal increase', or 'witnessed a downward trend', and avoid informal phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains several grammatical errors that affect the quality of the writing. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The exports consists', 'products which includes') and punctuation, such as missing spaces after periods. The sentence structures are relatively simple, with limited use of complex grammatical forms. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors and the lack of structural variety limit the score. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and improving sentence variety would be beneficial.
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