Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bat graph and table illustrate the information about export earnings over the time period of 2015 to 2016 along with percentage change in values in all category. The data has been calibrated in billions and inn percentage.
On scrutinizing the graph, it is lucid that petroleum products ,engineered good and textiles were earning more than 2015 in 2016. Engineered good had 8.5% benefit.on the other hand Textiles had 15.24% more earn in export. But cultivated products has only 0.81% earn.
Whereas in agricultural products, country was gained almost equal profit like last year. However, gems and jewellery where we can see as chart shows has a slightly decline in export and stable at below $50 billons. As 5.18% decline shows in given table.
From an overall analysis, it is clearly seen that all categories had more profitable from export things rather than gems and jewellery. It had fall as compared to last year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by identifying the main features of the data. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear, integrated overview. While you mention the growth in most categories and the decline in gems and jewellery, the report fails to accurately compare the specific values provided in the table. For instance, you mention 'almost equal profit' for agricultural products without referencing the actual figures or the percentage change. To reach a higher band, you must ensure that all data points are accurately interpreted and that the 'main features' are highlighted with more precision, rather than just listing individual categories.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'On scrutinizing the graph' and 'From an overall analysis' are used, but the logical flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed. For example, the transition between the second and third paragraphs is abrupt. Additionally, referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'where we can see as chart shows', which disrupts the flow of information. Improving the variety and precision of linking words would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors. For example, you use 'more profitable from export things' and 'more earn in export', which are not natural English expressions. You also use 'calibrated' incorrectly in the introduction. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'export earnings' and 'percentage change', the lack of precision in your word choice limits your score. To improve, focus on using more accurate collocations and avoiding repetitive or informal phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'cultivated products has'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'country was gained almost equal profit'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around percentages and commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and ensuring consistent verb tense usage.
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