Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar chart below shows the value of one country's export in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table illustrates the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Overall, the proportion of Engineered goods most increased. By contrast, the proportion of Gems and jewelry most decreased. Regarding Petroleum products, the percentage increased 3% from 60 to around 70. And the number of Engineered goods
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely impacts the ability to address all parts of the task. While you have attempted to identify some main features, such as the increase in Engineered goods and the decrease in Gems and jewelry, the response is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence. Because the task is not fully addressed and the data is not adequately reported or compared, it fails to meet the requirements for a higher band. To improve, you must ensure you provide a full overview, include all relevant data points, and complete your analysis to meet the word count.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is too short to demonstrate a clear logical progression or effective use of cohesive devices. While there is a basic attempt at an introduction and an overview, the text ends abruptly, preventing the development of a coherent structure. There is no paragraphing, and the flow of information is interrupted by the unfinished sentence. To improve, you should structure your response into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and specific details, using linking words like 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to connect your ideas logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'most increased' and 'most decreased' are not natural collocations for describing statistical trends. You also rely on simple phrasing to describe the data. To improve, you should aim for a wider range of vocabulary that is specific to describing charts and graphs. For example, instead of saying something 'increased', use more precise verbs like 'surged', 'climbed', or 'experienced a significant rise'. Additionally, ensure you use accurate terminology for percentages and values.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains a mix of simple sentence structures, but the incomplete nature of the text makes it difficult to assess your range. There are errors in basic sentence construction, such as 'the percentage increased 3% from 60 to around 70', which is mathematically confusing in the context of the prompt. The text ends with an unfinished sentence, which is a significant grammatical failure. To improve, focus on completing your sentences and ensuring subject-verb agreement. Practice using a variety of complex structures, such as relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, to improve your grammatical range.
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