Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the bar compare to export earning in 2015 to 2016 int he barproduct category in the show so first is petroleum products is most increased for the other because it is highest earning but 2015 in it almost 65 and 2016 in increased the while 2015 the bar show highset in bar is 2016 petroleum product and now engineer goods is almost between in petroleum product 64 and gems and jewellery is is in 2015 in decresed to a 50 percentage and agriculture products are day to day down fall is 40 and another is textiles to similar to agriculture is 37 and now 2016 at the petroleom is almost crack the bar is 69 and one of the highest and engineere is simlar to petroleum it 68 and jewellery is down to 50 a agriculture and textiles is same the range in 42 on 2016 and petroleum product 3% incresed and engineered good 8.5% and one the gems and jewellery iss 5.18 down and agriculture and textiles is 0.81 and 15.24 ton grow in product..
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task by describing the data, but it fails to provide a clear overview or a logical summary of the main features. The information is presented in a fragmented, list-like manner, making it difficult to follow the trends. While some figures are mentioned, the lack of clear structure and the confusion between the values for 2015 and 2016 hinder the reader's understanding. The response lacks a proper introduction and a concluding summary, which are essential for a Band 6 or higher. The data interpretation is often inaccurate or confusing, such as the mention of 'day to day down fall', which is not supported by the provided data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks paragraphing and logical progression. Ideas are presented in a stream-of-consciousness style without the use of cohesive devices to link sentences or clauses. There is no clear structure, and the transition between the description of 2015 and 2016 is abrupt and confusing. The lack of punctuation and the repetitive use of 'and' to connect unrelated points make the text difficult to navigate. To improve, the student should group related information into paragraphs and use linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'meanwhile' to show relationships between the data points.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'barproduct', 'decresed', 'petroleom', and 'engineere'. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing data, relying on informal or inaccurate phrasing like 'crack the bar' or 'day to day down fall'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express the trends with precision. To reach a higher band, the student needs to learn specific academic vocabulary for describing charts, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'witnessed a growth of', and 'accounted for'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There is a lack of sentence structure, with many run-on sentences and a complete absence of proper punctuation. Subject-verb agreement is frequently incorrect, and there is a lack of variety in sentence forms. The misuse of prepositions and articles is pervasive. The student relies on simple, poorly constructed sentences that lack the necessary complexity for an academic task. Significant effort is needed to master basic sentence construction, punctuation, and the correct use of tenses when describing past data.
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