Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given bar chart illustrates the value of one's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The first category is petroleum products in 2015 the export earning from petroleum products is 6billion dollars whereas in 2016 the rate is 60-70 billion dollars. The second category is engineered goods in 2015 the count of engineered goods is 60 billion ions whereas in 2016 the count is 65 billion ions. The third category is gems and jewellery in 2015, the cost of gems and jewellery is 50 billion dollars whereas in 2016, the expenditure made on gems and jewellery is 48 billion ions . The fourth category is agricultural products in 2015, the count money is about 52 billion dollars whereas in 2016, the money allocated on agricultural products is 44
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is incomplete; it fails to mention the percentage changes provided in the prompt and stops abruptly mid-sentence when discussing agricultural products. The data reporting is also inaccurate, as seen in the claim that petroleum exports rose from 6 billion to 60-70 billion, which does not align with typical data interpretation for this task. The response lacks an overview of the main trends, which is essential for a high band score in Task 1.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks paragraphing, appearing as a single block of text. While there is a basic attempt to list categories, the progression is mechanical and repetitive, relying on 'The first category', 'The second category', etc. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas or compare the data effectively. The abrupt ending further disrupts the flow of information, making the overall structure feel disjointed and incomplete.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, with phrases like 'the count of' and 'the money is' used repeatedly. There are significant issues with word choice, such as using 'ions' instead of 'dollars' or 'units', and 'expenditure made on' when referring to export earnings. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data accurately, and the errors in terminology impede the reader's understanding of the figures presented.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response consists almost entirely of simple, repetitive sentence structures. There is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing commas and periods, and the final sentence is incomplete. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, such as subject-verb agreement and the misuse of prepositions. These errors, combined with the lack of structural variety, limit the ability to communicate information clearly.
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