Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The information is about the country is export the various product such as Petroleum product , En gin good, Gems an jewellwry, Agricultural product, Textiles product in 2015 to 2016.

The Petroleum is export in 2015 is 60% and the change the value 8.5 %and in 2016 is 62%. And the En ginod is exprot in 2015 is all most 58% and change the value 3% nad then the value is about 60%. The Gems an jewellery is export in 2015 is 52% and the value is cxhange is 5.18% and then tjhe value of Gems an jewellery is 59% . The Agricultural product ia export in 2015 is all most 42 % and change of the value of agricultural 0.18 %.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have attempted to identify some data points, the summary is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. You have listed individual figures without effectively synthesising the information or making meaningful comparisons between the categories. Furthermore, the data interpretation is inconsistent, and the lack of a concluding summary or a clear structure prevents a full response to the task. To improve, ensure you provide a clear overview of the most significant changes and group related data points together rather than listing them in isolation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a logical structure. It is composed of a brief introduction and a single, poorly organized body paragraph. There is no clear progression of ideas, and the use of cohesive devices is almost entirely absent. Sentences are disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. To improve, you should organize your report into distinct paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and two body paragraphs that group data logically. Use linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'similarly' to connect your ideas and improve the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'En gin good' for 'Engineering goods', 'jewellwry', and 'exprot'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or data effectively. You rely on basic phrasing like 'the value is' repeatedly. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'increased by', 'experienced a rise of', or 'remained stable'. Additionally, please focus on proofreading your work to correct basic spelling mistakes, as these errors hinder the clarity of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The Petroleum is export'), incorrect word forms, and missing articles. Sentence structures are simple and repetitive, with no evidence of complex grammatical structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which further disrupts the readability of the text. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that your verbs agree with your subjects and that you use appropriate verb tenses when describing past data. Practice writing more complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.

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