Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This shows the value of one country export in different categories during 2015 and 2016. While the table present the percentage change in export in 2015 to 16 .

Overall, the graph is quit simple it tells increase and decrease percent of different products as compared with change in different goods . Payment should be in dollars while change should be in percent .

In 2015 the most popular and use able is petroleum products upto 7 $ while in 2016 rise to 60 $ . Later on engineering good also quit famous at least 5 $ in 2015 but increase in 2016 upto 68 $. But in next decade it drops and approximatley same gems an jewllery , agricultural products and textiles . Furthermore percentage is increse about 3% in 2025 to 16 . While 8.5% gain in engineering products . But gem and jewellery drop to 5.18% . Quit increse in agriculture products . Later on a huge rise 15.24% in Textiles .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to accurately interpret the data provided. The student confuses the export values with the percentage change figures, leading to significant inaccuracies in the report. For example, the claim that petroleum products rose to 60$ is not supported by the data, and the mention of '2025' is a clear error. While the main features are identified, the lack of clarity and the misinterpretation of the figures mean that the information is not presented in a way that allows the reader to understand the trends. The response lacks a clear overview and fails to accurately compare the categories as requested.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. The introduction is poorly phrased, and the body paragraphs do not follow a clear progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and often incorrect way, such as the misuse of 'Later on' and 'Furthermore'. Paragraphing is present but does not serve to organize the information effectively. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended meaning. The overall arrangement of information is disjointed, which hinders the flow of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'jewllery', 'increse', and 'quit' (used instead of 'quite'). The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing data, relying on basic and repetitive language. The word choice is often imprecise, which leads to confusion regarding the data being described. There is little evidence of an attempt to use a range of vocabulary suitable for an academic report, and the errors in word choice and spelling are frequent enough to impede communication at times.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, incorrect tense usage, and sentence fragments. For instance, 'This shows the value of one country export' lacks proper article usage and pluralization. The sentence structures are simple and often repetitive, with very few successful attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of decimals and currency symbols. These persistent errors make the text difficult to read and understand.

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