Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given bar chart elucidate information about Export Earnings (2015 to 2016) . The chart compare different categories and present the data in number .
Overall the chat different compare the categories shown in the chart , The Export Earnings 2016 highest to 2015 . In addation some catogories show some flucaction increament as well as decreament and high some stable .
According to the chat, the first activites petroleum products 2016 65% to 2015 60 % percentage in change value 8.5% in up . The followed by second activite Engin goods the percentage to 2016 60 % to 2015 55% the percentage change in value Engineered goods 3% in chart . The third activites Gems and jewellery 2016 50% to 2015 52% in chart the change in value Gems and jewellery 5.18% in loowest the chart . The second last activites Agricultural products 2016 40% to 2015 38% the change in value 0.81% in high in the chart . The last activites Textiles 2016 40 % to 2015 35% in chat . The percentage chante in valu 2015 to 2016
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary. While you identify some data points, the description is often confusing and contains significant inaccuracies regarding the figures provided in the prompt. For example, you state that petroleum products increased by 8.5%, but the table shows a different figure. Furthermore, the overview is poorly constructed and does not effectively highlight the main trends or significant differences between the years. To improve, focus on identifying the most notable features—such as which category saw the highest growth or decline—rather than listing every data point in a repetitive manner.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay lacks a logical structure. The paragraphs are disjointed, and the transition between ideas is often abrupt or missing. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Overall' and 'According to the chart', but these are not used effectively to guide the reader through the data. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow which category or year is being discussed. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear focus and use linking words more naturally to connect your observations. The lack of a clear conclusion or summary also hinders the overall flow of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You frequently use the same words, such as 'chart', 'activities', and 'percentage', which restricts the quality of your writing. There are also numerous spelling errors, such as 'elucidate' (used incorrectly), 'addation', 'catogories', 'flucaction', and 'loowest'. These errors, combined with the misuse of terms like 'activities' to describe export categories, make the text difficult to understand. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your vocabulary to include more precise terms for describing data trends, such as 'surged', 'declined', 'remained stable', or 'fluctuated'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is weak, with frequent errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, missing articles, and incorrect sentence structure. For example, 'The given bar chart elucidate information' should be 'The given bar chart elucidates information'. Additionally, many sentences are fragmented or lack a clear verb, such as 'The percentage chante in valu 2015 to 2016'. You rely almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often grammatically incorrect. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve your score.
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