Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given below baar graphs show the value of one county's exports in various categories during time period of 2015 and 2016 and the table shows the percentage of changes in each category of exports in this two time period.
overall bar graph shows the export earing in two year and highes exported was petroleum products and lowes exported was textIn
In 2015 petroleum products was the highest exported 60 billons dollars was exported and in 2016 was raise and exported nearly about 63 billons dollars lowest was textiles expoted nearly 38 billion dollars of textilies in 2015 and in 2016 apporax 42 bollions dollars of textiles was exportedand then agricultural products was allmost similar in both the year in 2015 40 billions dollars of agricultual products was exported and almost same in 2016.
The product category in 2015 to 2016 in percentage change in values petroleum products raise by 8.5% and en gineered goods up by 3% and gems and jewellery down by 5.18 percent.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by summarising the main features of the provided charts, noting categories such as petroleum products and textiles. However, the response lacks a clear overview and fails to systematically report and compare all key data points. Several figures are inaccurate or poorly contextualised, and the information is presented in a disorganised manner without clear separation of the data categories. While some relevant details are highlighted, such as the highest and lowest export values and percentage changes like 8.5% for petroleum, the overall development of ideas is limited and under-developed, aligning closely with the Band 5 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response shows severe deficiencies in organisation and cohesion. Paragraphing is highly erratic, with most of the text clumped into a single massive, run-on paragraph that mixes disparate points together without logical progression. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, leading to fragmented and confusing transitions between sentences. Pronoun referencing and signposting are weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. There is no clear overall structure, resulting in a performance that meets the criteria for Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily flawed by spelling and word-choice errors. The student frequently misspells common terms, writing "baar" for bar, "county's" for country's, "earing" for earnings, "highes" for highest, "lowes" for lowest, and "textIn" for textiles. Other errors include non-standard phrases like "raise" used as a noun or incorrectly conjugated verb, and repeated misspellings such as "billons", "expoted", "textilies", and "apporax". The lexical range is severely limited and inadequate for academic reporting, causing noticeable strain and difficulty for the reader, which places this firmly at Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response, featuring a very limited range of sentence structures. Almost every sentence contains serious grammatical errors, including missing auxiliary verbs, incorrect tense usage, subject-verb agreement issues, and run-on sentences lacking proper punctuation. Examples include "in 2015 petroleum products was the highest exported 60 billons dollars was exported and in 2016 was raise" and "textiles expoted nearly 38 billion dollars of textilies in 2015 and in 2016 apporax 42 bollions dollars... was exportedand then...". Frequent structural errors and poor punctuation distort meaning and cause severe difficulty for the reader, matching the Band 4.0 descriptors.
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