Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The below graphe illustrates the value of one country's exports different categories between the year 2015 and 2016.The table depicts the proportion change in each single category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
In this bar garphe export earnings of 2015 to 2016 can be noted pertroleum products, engineering goods also gems and jewellery, agricultural products and textiles in 2015 the large difference petroleum products almost 6.1 billions dollor as compare to textiles 3.8 billions which is least noted while engineering goods hit 5.8 billion dollor also gems 5.5 billions and agriculural products 4.2 billions recorded.
percantage change in values 2015 and 2016 the most upward textiles 15.24% while the least down 5.18% in 2016 also petroleum products 3% increased as well as engineering products which is 8.5% and agricultural products is 0.81%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to cover both the bar chart and the table by mentioning the categories, export earnings in 2015, and the percentage changes in 2016. However, the data cited contains numerous inaccuracies and misreadings compared to the visual data (e.g., stating petroleum products were '6.1 billions dollor' instead of 61 billion, and misinterpreting the chart values entirely). Furthermore, the word count is only 134 words, thus failing to meet the minimum requirement of 150 words, which incurs a direct penalty on Task Achievement. The overview is weak, and the data is presented in a very confused manner.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical organisation and clear paragraphing. Sentences run together without proper transitions or cohesive devices, and the text is broken into abrupt, confusing blocks instead of a structured report. Referencing is unclear, and the overall progression of information is difficult to follow, which severely impacts readability and coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive ('graphes', 'dollor', 'percantage'). There are frequent spelling mistakes and inaccurate word choices throughout the text. The student attempts some less common terms like 'proportion change', but these are undermined by severe spelling and collocation errors that hinder clear communication at times.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of fragmented or poorly constructed simple and complex sentences. There is a near-total lack of accurate punctuation and control over basic sentence boundaries, leading to run-on sentences like 'In this bar garphe export earnings of 2015 to 2016 can be noted...'. Frequent errors in verb forms, prepositions, and agreement cause significant difficulty for the reader.
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