Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar chart illustrates the value if country exports in different categories over the period from 2015 to 2016. and The table displays the proportion transform in each category of exports in 2016 comoare with 2015.
Overall, it is clear that there are more exports earnings in 2015 to 2016. the highest is the petroleum products and lowest is agriculture products and textiles. table chart have percentage change valuse in 2015 to 2016. highest engeneering goods and lowest is agriculture products.
Looking at the bar chart, In 2016 petroleum have highest $bi ions it us above 6. in 2015 petroleum is 6. gems an jewellery is the above 50 and 50 in 2015 and 2016. finally textiles is the lowest below 40 and avove 50.
Looking at the table chart, highest is the engineering goods it is 8.5%. second is the textiles 15.21%. 5.18% is the gema and jewellery. petroleum and agricultural products it is accounted for 3% and 0.81%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The student attempts to address the prompt by discussing both the bar chart and the table. However, the data reporting is severely inaccurate and confusing. For instance, the student states that petroleum products in 2016 were above 6 and in 2015 were 6, completely misreading the scale which is in billions (61 and 63 billions). Furthermore, the description of gems and jewellery ('above 50 and 50') and textiles ('below 40 and avove 50') does not align with the provided visual data. While the main features are touched upon, the lack of accurate data interpretation and numerous misreadings prevent the response from achieving a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into short paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs dedicated to the chart and table respectively. However, the logical progression is weak and disjointed. Cohesive devices are minimal and often misused, as seen with abrupt transitions like 'and The table' starting a new sentence awkwardly, or 'finally textiles is the lowest'. Paragraphing is attempted, but ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and repetitive, resulting in a confusing structure overall.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The lexical range is quite limited and repetitive. The student uses basic vocabulary such as 'highest', 'lowest', 'value', and 'categories'. There are noticeable word choice and spelling errors throughout the text, including 'if' instead of 'of', 'comoare' instead of 'compare', 'engeneered' instead of 'engineered', and 'gema' instead of 'gems'. These lexical inadequacies and spelling mistakes occasionally impede communication and restrict the score to the lower bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent structural errors. There are issues with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, such as 'petroleum have highest' and 'petroleum is 6'. Punctuation is also problematic, including lowercase letters at the start of sentences after periods (e.g., 'and The table', 'the highest', 'In 2016 petroleum'). Frequent grammatical errors cause strain for the reader.
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