Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
As every market is in always growing stage day by day. Now in this graph and given situation we can see that export earnings of 2015 are less than that of 2016. the 2015 bar is shown in black color and the 2016 bar is shown by white color In this graph. We can see on the vertical line that petroleum products which are shown by the horizontal line cost was almost 60 billion dollars but than u can see in 2016 its increased by 3 to 4 percent. In other case engineer goods were almost above 50 dollars but in 2016 they were more than 50 dollars. How ever other exports are same like increasing more than previous one. But we can also see that some time the export is increasing slow but in some cases it is increasing fast and more from the previous one. It is all depends on the marketing strategy and deep analysis
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by discussing the export earnings of different categories in 2015 and 2016. However, the data presentation is weak, confused, and inaccurate. For instance, the student states that petroleum products cost 'almost 60 billion dollars', which is partially accurate for 2015 (61), but then mentions vague increases like '3 to 4 percent' (the actual chart states 3%). Furthermore, the student misreads or fails to report key data points for engineered goods, gems and jewellery, and textiles, and instead includes irrelevant personal commentary at the end ('It is all depends on the marketing strategy...'). This places the response in Band 4, as the information is poorly selected and lacks a coherent overview of the main trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks proper paragraphing, presented instead as a single block of text. There is no clear logical organization or progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as abrupt transitions ('In other case', 'How ever', 'It is all depends'). Pronoun referencing is also frequently unclear, as seen in phrases like 'the 2015 bar is shown in black color and the 2016 bar is shown by white color In this graph.' Because the information and ideas are not arranged cohesively, the response struggles to guide the reader through the data, fitting the Band 4 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and restricted to simple terms related to the task, such as 'graph', 'export', 'earnings', and 'increasing'. There are noticeable inaccuracies in word choice and collocations, such as 'engineer goods' instead of 'engineered goods', and awkward phrasing like 'in always growing stage day by day'. The limited range and frequent lexical errors constrain precision and occasionally strain the reader's understanding, aligning closely with Band 4 descriptors for Lexical Resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The text displays a very limited range of sentence structures, consisting mostly of simple or poorly constructed compound-complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical and punctuation errors that impede communication, such as sentence fragments ('the 2015 bar is shown in black color and the 2016 bar is shown by white color In this graph.'), missing articles ('in always growing stage'), subject-verb agreement issues ('export earnings of 2015 are...'), and incorrect prepositions ('cost was almost... but than u can see'). These pervasive errors mean the grammatical control remains at a Band 4 level.
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