Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar chart below illustrates the comparasion betweem four categoies of export between year 2015 and 2016. The units was given in billions $.
Overall, there is increase in number of eports in 2016 then 2015, except of the gems and jwelery, in which gems show sightly higher export then in 2016.
Pwetroleun prducts showed highest exposrt ove the two years with values of 6o and 65 over the In year2015 and 2015 respectively. . Engineered goods showed the difference having the value of 8.5^ by the 63 and 65, in year of 2016 and 2015. In 2015, gems an jewellery had the value of little abve then 50in 2015 then 50 of 2016. . Agriculturs roducts showed the comarable value of the 40. in both yers. while in case of textilemajor difernce could br drrm with arriving at the value of the jut above 4o and 35 oer the time period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by discussing the export categories shown in the visual data, providing an overview and mentioning various figures. However, the response falls short of fully satisfying Task Achievement requirements due to severe inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the student states that Petroleum products had values of '60 and 65', whereas the true figures are 61 and 63. More critically, the numbers cited for other categories (such as '40', '35', and values above 50) do not correspond to the actual data in the chart or table, suggesting significant misinterpretation of the axes and values. Although an overview is attempted, the pervasive inaccuracies in data handling mean that the main features are not accurately reported or compared.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organisational structure of the response is extremely weak. While the student attempts an introductory sentence and a brief overview, the body of the text lacks logical progression and clear paragraphing, collapsing into a single dense and confusing block of text. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, and referencing is frequently unclear, making it very difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information or understand which data points are being contrasted. Consequently, the arrangement of information fails to achieve clear coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The lexical range is extremely limited and heavily impacted by numerous spelling and word-choice errors. Throughout the text, basic words are misspelled, such as 'comparasion', 'betweem', 'categoies', 'eports', 'jwelery', 'sightley', 'Pwetroleun', 'prducts', 'exosrt', 'Agriculturs', and 'difernce'. The student attempts some topic-related vocabulary such as 'export', 'category', and 'engineered goods', but the high frequency of lexical errors and distorted terms significantly impedes communication and strains the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting predominantly of simple and frequently malformed sentence structures. There are persistent and severe grammatical errors throughout the response, including missing articles, incorrect prepositions, awkward phrasing ('except of the gems and jwelery'), and broken syntax (e.g., 'Engineered goods showed the difference having the value of 8.5^ by the 63 and 65'). Punctuation is also handled poorly, with stray punctuation marks and broken sentences ('..'). These errors are constant and frequently obscure the intended meaning.
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