Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given bar chart illustrates statistics about the value of one country's export in various categories from two thousand fiftheen to two thousand sixtheen.

Overall its is clear that Petroleum products has the highest exports in two thousand fiftheen While,Textiles industry has very least exports in two thousand fifteen

As we can see that the Petroleum products export started from twenty billion in two thosuand fiftheen and then slighty up to above seventy and then there export is dramtically fell down to the fourty billion while Agricultural and jewellery both are same in from fitheen to sixty year

engin good industry

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The student has failed to meet the minimum word count of 150 words, writing only 101 words, which significantly restricts the development of the task. Furthermore, the response contains severe misinterpretations of the visual data. For instance, the student states that Petroleum products started from 'twenty billion' (the actual 2015 figure is 61 billion) and that they fell 'dramatically ... to the fourty billion' (the 2016 figure is actually 63 billion). The attempt to summarise main features is heavily undermined by inaccurate figures, spelling errors in numbers (e.g., 'fiftheen', 'sixtheen'), and an incomplete conclusion that trails off into fragmented notes. Consequently, this falls under Band 4.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The essay lacks clear logical organization and progression. While there is an opening introductory sentence and an attempt at an overview marker ('Overall its is clear that'), the body paragraphs are disjointed, poorly structured, and break down completely at the end with disconnected fragments like 'engin good industry'. Cohesive devices are minimal and mechanical, and referencing between data points is frequently unclear or incorrect. Paragraphing is not used effectively, as the text consists of short, broken sentences and isolated fragments rather than cohesive units of thought. Overall, the structural arrangement aligns with Band 4 descriptors.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The lexical range is very limited and basic, with frequent spelling errors that impede communication. Words are repeatedly misspelled throughout the text, such as 'fiftheen' for fifteen, 'sixtheen' for sixteen, 'thosuand' for thousand, 'slighty' for slightly, 'dramtically' for dramatically, and 'fourty' for forty. The student attempts a few topic-specific terms like 'export' and 'industy', but control over word formation, spelling, and collocations is weak. Because the errors are frequent and strain the reader, the response fits the Band 4 descriptor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mainly of simple structures and failed attempts at complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('has the highest exports', 'Textiles industry'), incorrect verb forms ('there export is dramtically fell down'), and severe punctuation and capitalization issues. The sentence structures are frequently incomplete or malformed, especially towards the end of the response where sentences break off entirely. These pervasive errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from reaching higher bands.

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