Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart ilustrates data about percentage export backs of five category products between two years which are 2015 and 2016 .

Overall , the comparaison figure shows that Petroleum products is the highest export earning in both years following by Engineered goods whereas, Textiles is the lowest exporting product .

the figure compare the earning export products in addition its shows a slightly increase in Petroleum products 3% between 2015 to 2016 however, Engineered goods provide a significante increase in earning export by 8% in the twoo years such as Textiles which shows an increase of 15.24% on backs over the twoo years , while both Agricultural products remain stable in both years around 43 bilion as earning .

To sume up , the power of products export over the two years 2015 and 2016 is including in Petroleum and Engineered goods products moreover the Textiles export product show a significante change in 2016 .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the task by reporting information from the chart and table regarding export earnings in 2015 and 2016. However, there are significant data inaccuracies and confusion present in the text. For instance, the student states that 'Agricultural products remain stable in both years around 43 bilion as earning', whereas the chart clearly shows agricultural products at 31 billion. Furthermore, the selection of main features lacks clarity, and the percentage changes are somewhat clumsily integrated. While an overview is attempted ('Overall, the comparaison figure shows...'), the overall response suffers from inaccuracies in data interpretation, pulling the task achievement score down into the lower-middle band.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The text is divided into paragraphs, showing an attempt at a basic structure including an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, logical progression is hindered by poor sentence construction and mechanical transitional phrases such as 'To sume up'. Cohesive devices are overused or used inaccurately ('in addition its shows', 'however', 'moreover'). Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the relationships between ideas. Overall arrangement shows some basic organization, but cohesion is faulty throughout.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The student attempts less common vocabulary such as 'comparaison', 'significante', and 'export earning', but these are frequently marred by spelling and word-choice errors ('ilustrates', 'backs', 'bilion', 'sume up'). The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with awkward phrasing like 'percentage export backs of five category products'. Word choice is sometimes inadequate for clear communication, placing it solidly in the lower-intermediate bracket.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, with frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and tense consistency. Examples of structural and grammatical failures include 'the figure compare the earning export products in addition its shows a slightly increase', and 'Engineered goods provide a significante increase... such as Textiles which shows an increase...'. Punctuation is often erratic (e.g., spaces before commas and periods). Errors are frequent and often cause strain for the reader.

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