Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrates the proportion one country's exports in five categories between 2015 and 2016 and the categories included petroleum product, engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural products and textiles. The table displays the percentage change in five features in values. The percencetage measures by billions and values.
Overall, petroleum is the highest value during the period while agricultural products and textile were the least.Textiles was the largest percentage during the year and engineered goods was the lowest.
In terms of the bar chart, in 2016 was dominated by petroleum products almost peak. It was followed by engineered goods around 61 billions. Gems and jewellery stood at approximately 42 billions, while agricultural and textiles were the lowest around 32 billions respectively. While in 2015, textiles was the lowest aproximately stood at 25 billlions and the top position was taken by petroleum products at 61 billions. However, all of the bar chart in 2015 was consistenly decreased
In regards to the table, textiles was the highest percentage around 15.24%, petroleum products was the second highest at 8.5%. In contrast, gems and jewellery was 5.18%. The second lower was engineered goods reached 3% and agricultural product was the lowest at 0.81%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
Siswa mencoba mencakup seluruh bagian tugas dengan melaporkan informasi dari diagram batang maupun tabel. Namun, terdapat ketidakakuratan dan kebingungan yang nyata dalam interpretasi data. Sebagai contoh, siswa menulis bahwa 'textiles was the largest percentage during the year and engineered goods was the lowest,' yang mengacaukan jenis data, dan kemudian secara keliru mengklaim bahwa 'all of the bar chart in 2015 was consistenly decreased.' Nilai-nilai yang dikutip juga mengandung beberapa ketidakakuratan, seperti menyatakan tekstil pada tahun 2015 berada pada angka 25 miliar padahal sekitar 26 miliar. Terlepas dari kekurangan-kekurangan ini, ikhtisar telah dicoba dibuat dan fitur-fitur utama telah diidentifikasi, menempatkan respons ini pada Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
Respons ini diorganisasikan ke dalam empat paragraf, yang mencerminkan pendahuluan standar, ikhtisar, serta dua paragraf tubuh masing-masing untuk diagram dan tabel. Namun, alur perkembangan sering kali terhambat oleh penamaan frasa yang janggal dan kurangnya tautan logis yang jelas. Sebagai contoh, transisi 'while in 2015...' digunakan secara membingungkan, dan peranti kohesif sering kali bersifat mekanis atau disalahgunakan ('In terms of the bar chart, in 2016 was dominated by...'). Pemenggalan paragraf sudah ada, tetapi kohesi internal memerlukan pengacuan yang lebih baik untuk mencapai skor yang lebih tinggi. Secara keseluruhan, Koherensi dan Kohesi sesuai dengan deskriptor Band 5.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
Siswa menunjukkan kosakata yang memadai untuk menyampaikan informasi dasar, menggunakan istilah-istilah seperti 'proportion', 'exports', 'categories', dan 'percentage change'. Namun, terdapat kesalahan leksikal yang mencolok, seperti 'percencetage', 'measures by billions', serta kebingungan antara kata benda dan kata sifat. Kosakata yang kurang umum dicoba digunakan dengan keberhasilan yang terbatas ('consistenly decreased', 'stand at'). Kesalahan ejaan seperti 'percencetage' dan kolokasi yang janggal muncul di seluruh teks, meskipun makna umumnya tetap dapat dipahami, yang membenarkan perolehan Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
Campuran struktur kalimat sederhana dan kompleks telah dicoba digunakan, tetapi penguasaan tata bahasa masih lemah. Terdapat kesalahan yang sering terjadi dalam kala kerja, penggunaan preposisi, dan konstruksi kalimat. Sebagai contoh, 'The bar chart illustrates the proportion one country's exports' kurang memiliki preposisi, dan 'in 2016 was dominated by' tidak memiliki subjek yang jelas. Kesalahan lainnya meliputi 'textiles was... respectively' dan masalah kesesuaian jamak. Kesalahan-kesalahan yang sering terjadi ini menimbulkan sedikit kesulitan bagi pembaca, sehingga skor tata bahasa sejajar dengan Band 5.0.
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