Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph explained the value of one country's exports in various categories between 1 year of time period .Given table shows campare the change in percentage.

Initially, pertroleum products are exported widely in overall as compare to other products and in the least textiles are ,which are less the other in the time period.

overall,petroleum products are being expoted more then other,around 60 billions earning in 2015 and in approx 72 billions in 2016.well engineered goods are also the position which earns 57 billions and as per demand increases it earns 60 billions in 2016.similarly gems earn 55 billions in 2015 , however people are showing less interest it earns50 billions approx in 2016 .necessary products agricultural earns 42 billions exported in 2015 and same as in 2016.Textiles are being less exported which are 35 billions and earns 42 billions in 2016 which change the percentage.

overall petroleum products are being widely exported which are increasing contionusly and earn more in it as compare to other

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the provided chart and table data, but the information reported is often inaccurate or misread. For instance, the writer states that petroleum earnings were 'in approx 72 billions in 2016' and that gems earned '55 billions in 2015', which significantly departs from the actual figures shown in the visual data. While an overview is attempted, the limited and flawed selection of features means the response only minimally addresses the requirements of the prompt, focusing heavily on incorrect data points rather than the main trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The organization of information lacks clear progression and logical structure. Although the text is broken into short paragraphs, the overall arrangement is confusing, jumping between different years and product categories without a clear strategy. Cohesive devices are basic and repetitively used, such as starting multiple sentences with 'overall' or 'initially'. Furthermore, referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information across the comparison of categories.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'earns', 'products', and 'exported'. There are several noticeable word choice and word form errors throughout the text, such as 'pertroleum', 'campare', 'contionusly', and 'expoted'. These errors, alongside inaccurate collocations like 'necessary products agricultural', restrict the range of vocabulary and occasionally cause strain for the reader in interpreting the specific data categories.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical structures employed are very limited and repetitive. The text contains frequent errors in verb tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'The bar graph explained' (tense shift), 'textiles are ,which are less the other', and 'in the least textiles are'. Complex sentences are attempted but are generally faulty and poorly constructed. Punctuation is also erratic, with misplaced commas and spacing errors that further disrupt the flow of reading.

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