Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given chart depicts the exports of a country during 2015 and 2016.It also depicts the changes between these two years.
We see in 2016 the export of petroleum products, Engineering goods ,and Textile was higher about 62 ,60 and 37 percent as compared to 2015 .The earnings from Gems and jewellery was about 50 percent in 2016 as compared to 2015 .In 2015 the export of Gems and jewellery was about 53 percent.In 2016 the exports of Agriculture products was 41 percent as compared to 2015 which was about 40 percent.An increase in textile industry seemed to appear in 2016 .
The change in percentage value in petroleum is about 3 Percent in these two years.Engineering goods earned percentage about 8.5 percent.Gem and jewellery industry has changed in revenue about 5.18 Agricultural products show change in percentage of about .18 Textile industry shows change in percentage of about 15.24 percent during these two uears.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by reporting figures from the chart and the table, but it fails to present a clear, accurate overview of the main trends. The student misinterprets the data significantly, frequently confusing absolute export values in billions of dollars with percentages, such as stating that 'export of petroleum products... was higher about 62... percent'. Furthermore, the data points selected are often inaccurate or lack necessary context, reflecting only a partial and confusing response to the task. To reach a higher level, the writer must accurately report the figures provided in the visual data, distinguish clearly between billions of dollars and percentage changes, and include a well-defined overview highlighting the overall trends.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The text shows some basic organisation with a brief introduction followed by body details, but there is no clear overall progression or logical structure. Paragraphing is weak and arbitrary, with sentences grouped awkwardly together, such as merging distinct data points into a single dense paragraph without clear logical transitions. Additionally, cohesive devices are extremely limited and repetitive, which makes the flow mechanical and difficult to follow. To improve Coherence and Cohesion, the writer needs to group related data into clear, distinct paragraphs—such as separating the baseline export values from the percentage changes—and use a wider range of appropriate cohesive links to guide the reader smoothly through the comparison of data.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple phrases like 'export of', 'was about', and 'compared to'. There are notable lexical inaccuracies and misuse of terms, such as confusing currency values with percentages ('export of petroleum products... was higher about 62... percent'). Spelling is generally acceptable, but the overall lexical range is limited and inadequate for a precise discussion of statistical data. To achieve a higher score, the student should incorporate a wider variety of less common vocabulary and precise reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'revenue', 'earnings', 'fluctuate', or 'growth', while ensuring terms are used with correct collocations and accurate meanings.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent attempts at comparisons that contain structural errors. There are frequent grammatical errors in verb forms, prepositions, and number agreement, such as 'The earnings from Gems and jewellery was' (singular verb with plural-looking subject) and 'during these two uears' (typographical and spelling issues within grammatical contexts). Punctuation and spacing errors, such as missing spaces after periods, are also noticeable. To improve, the student should practice forming accurate complex sentences, maintain consistent tense control when describing past data, and work on basic subject-verb agreement and article use.
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