Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
the bar chart illustrate export earnings of one country in different categories of products over a period of one year starting from 2015 to 2016.while the table shows the percentage change in each category of both petroleum products and engineered goods in 2016 compared with 2015
overall, petroleum producs was the most expansive export, wherease textiles was generaly the least common.Furthermore, 2016 had the highest proportion in the majorities of export products
in detail, Petroleum products was Around 70$ for 2015 and 2016 making it in the highest figure amonge the four other products this was closely followed by Engin goods 75$ and
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response only partially addresses the task requirements. First, it fails to meet the minimum word length requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at just 103 words. Second, while it attempts to summarise the visual data by mentioning 'petroleum products' and 'engineered goods', the information reported is inaccurate and misreads the provided figures (for instance, claiming petroleum products were around $70 in 2015 and 2016 when the actual value was around 61 and 63 billion, and inventing values such as $75). Furthermore, the text trails off mid-sentence, leaving the summary incomplete. To improve, you must ensure you write at least 150 words, accurately report data directly from the charts without inventing figures, and fully complete your overview and details.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some attempt at organisation with an introductory sentence and an overall summary ('overall, petroleum producs was the most expansive export'), but there is no clear overall progression due to the text cutting off prematurely. Cohesive devices are minimal, and referencing is weak, such as transitioning abruptly with 'in detail' before the writing stops. Paragraphing is attempted but lacks proper development. To achieve a higher band, you need to structure your writing into clear, logical paragraphs with proper cohesive links such as 'In addition' or 'Turning to the details', ensuring a complete and well-supported progression of ideas from introduction to conclusion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for the task. There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, such as 'producs' instead of 'products', 'expansive' instead of 'expensive' or 'lucrative', 'generaly' instead of 'generally', and 'majorities' instead of 'majority'. These inaccuracies stem from basic vocabulary attempts. To improve, you need to expand your range of vocabulary, use precise terminology relevant to graphs (such as 'revenue', 'earnings', or 'export value'), and carefully check your spelling and word forms before submitting your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of structures with frequent errors. There is a complete lack of proper punctuation and capitalization at the beginning of sentences (e.g., 'the bar chart illustrate', 'while the table shows'). Subject-verb agreement errors are also present, such as 'the bar chart illustrate' instead of 'illustrates'. Complex sentence structures are poorly handled, and the sentence fragments result in grammatical distortion. To move up, you need to incorporate a wider mix of simple and complex sentence forms while maintaining strict control over basic grammar, punctuation, articles, and verb tenses.
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