Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the value of one state divisions in different types during the year 2015 and 2016.
Overall, Petroleum products and Engineered goods both rose steadily in 2016 as comapred to previous year but Textiles industry has the most percentage among all of these and Gems and Jewellery are the only products which declined in the year 2016.
On one side of this chart, shows a lot of changes in overseas earnings. In 2015, petroleum products are only at 6bi ions and it climbed to 3% in upcoming year furthermore, engineered goods slightly rose in the year 2016 and it is 8.5% it has most percentage with previous one. the most enhanced category is Textiles and it has the highest propotion of percentage in the year (2016) 15.24%.
On the other hand, there is a slight change in agricultural products it is almost reamin stable in the year 2016 (0.81%) however there is one product that decreases in 2016 and it's the Gems and Jewellery. it declined most and only one class who fell their own demand.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the main parts of the task by attempting to summarise the export earnings and percentage changes, and it presents an overview, such as mentioning that petroleum products and engineered goods rose while gems and jewellery declined. However, the task achievement is only partially met because there are significant misinterpretations of the data provided in the chart and table. For example, the writer states that in 2015 petroleum products were at '6bi ions' and climbed to 3% in the upcoming year, which confuses absolute earnings values with percentage change figures. Similarly, the percentages cited are sometimes attributed incorrectly. To reach a higher level, the response needs to accurately report the actual figures and growth rates without confusing the categories of data.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response attempts a logical organisation by dividing the information into an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs for different categories. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression, and the logical transition between ideas is hindered by confusing data references. Cohesive devices are used, but they are sometimes repetitive or inaccurate, such as 'On one side of this chart' and 'On the other hand', which do not fit the visual data format well. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak due to run-on sentences and unclear referencing. To improve, the writer should ensure each paragraph flows logically and that cohesive markers are used accurately to connect related points.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The writer attempts some less common terms and data-related vocabulary such as 'earnings', 'proportion', and 'declined', but these are accompanied by noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and form, such as 'state divisions' instead of sectors or categories, and 'bi ions' instead of billions. There are also issues with word forms, such as 'propotion'. These lexical slips and inaccuracies sometimes cause difficulty or confusion for the reader. To achieve a higher standard, the writer needs to expand their range of vocabulary for describing statistical data and use terms with greater precision and correct spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writing shows a limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to run-on structures and comma splices, such as in the second paragraph where multiple clauses are joined without proper punctuation. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement ('petroleum products are only at 6bi ions and it climbed'), missing articles, and awkward prepositions. These frequent errors cause strain and difficulty for the reader in understanding the precise meaning. To improve, the writer must focus on mastering simple sentence construction, using correct tense consistency when describing past data, and avoiding run-on sentences by separating distinct clauses with appropriate punctuation.
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