Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This bar chart illustrates about the exports of various products in one country during 2015 and 2016 and shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2015 and 2016.

Overall the petroleum products and engineering goods are mostly imported products in various categories . Agricultural products and textiles were exported only 40 % which are very less as compared to other products in graph .

In 2015 petroleum products are 60 % and in 2016 more than 65% petroleum products are exported which were the largest export product inn these years . Engineering products in 2015 exported less than 60 percent and in 2016 more then 60 % products were exported in 2016 which were equal to the petroleum products export

Gems and jewellery exports were almost 50% in 2015 and less then 50 % in 2016 . while agricultural products and textiles exports were almost equal in 2015 and 2016 , exports were 40 to 43 % in both 2015 and 2016 , and exports of textiles were 35% in 2015 and 42 % in 2016 which is more then 2015.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the prompt by discussing the export data for various product categories between 2015 and 2016, but it misinterprets the nature of the data significantly. The student repeatedly mistakes export earnings measured in billions of dollars for percentages (e.g., writing 'petroleum products are 60 %' instead of $61 billion), which severely limits the accuracy and relevance of the information presented. Furthermore, some key features and comparisons are omitted or confused, resulting in a minimal and flawed response to the visual data provided.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The organization of the text is somewhat disjointed and lacks a clear, logical progression. Although there is an introductory sentence and an attempt at an overview, the body paragraphs group information haphazardly and fail to guide the reader through the data smoothly. Cohesive devices are used very mechanically or inappropriately, such as repetitive transitions and faulty referencing, which makes the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Paragraphing is also poorly managed, with related data points split confusingly across the text.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms like 'products', 'exports', and 'exported'. There are noticeable lexical errors, such as using 'imported' instead of 'exported' in the overview, and confusing units of measurement by treating billions of dollars as percentages. These limitations and inaccuracies mean the vocabulary is only minimally adequate for the task, resulting in a restricted range of expression that occasionally causes confusion for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent errors when attempting more complex patterns. There are recurring issues with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency (such as shifting awkwardly between past and present forms), and missing articles. Frequent grammatical errors and punctuation issues persist throughout the text, although they rarely completely obscure the core meaning, keeping the control of grammar at a basic level.

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