Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar graph illustrates the information of supply of single nation in different categories on 2015 and 2016 and table represnt the change in each category of exports.
overall the petroleum products and engineered goods occupied at the top at both the year,moreover
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The response falls significantly short of the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly after only 43 words. Consequently, the task is addressed only minimally. While the introduction attempts to outline the subject matter of the bar graph and table, no body paragraphs are completed, and the overview is cut off mid-sentence. Key features and comparisons are entirely absent because the text is incomplete. To reach higher bands, the writer must ensure they write a fully developed response that meets the word count and covers all parts of the visual data with a clear overview and supporting details.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
The text begins with an introductory sentence and attempts an overview using transitional words such as 'overall' and 'moreover'. However, because the response breaks off after only a few lines, there is no logical progression or successful paragraph structure. Cohesive devices are introduced prematurely without supporting content to connect. To improve coherence and cohesion, the writer needs to structure the essay into clear, distinct paragraphs—such as a dedicated overview paragraph followed by body paragraphs—and use cohesive devices smoothly to guide the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and includes noticeable errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'supply of single nation' instead of 'exports of a country' and 'represnt' (spelling error). Other phrases like 'occupied at the top' are unnatural. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for attempting a description of economic data. To improve in this criterion, the writer should learn accurate collocations related to charts and graphs, such as 'account for', 'revenue', and 'export earnings', while paying closer attention to spelling and precise word choices.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The writer attempts a complex sentence structure in the opening sentence, though it contains grammatical inaccuracies such as 'on 2015 and 2016' instead of 'in 2015 and 2016'. Punctuation is also problematic, as seen in the lowercase start to the overview sentence and the run-on nature of the incomplete text. Because the response is so brief, only a very limited range of structures is demonstrated, and frequent structural errors appear in the few clauses produced. To progress, the writer needs to practice basic sentence construction, accurate preposition usage for dates and data, and correct capitalization and punctuation.
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