Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
the bar chart shows, overall, the eraning form exports from different goods in two different years of 2015 and 2016. Dark grey colour represent earning in 2015 and the other colour represent earning in 2016.
overall, earning from exporting jewelry and eng goods is more as compare to other products in 2015 the earning of petrolium products is about to 60 billions and in 2016 its rise to 65 billions. And there is slightly difference of revenue from agriculture products in both years.
furthermore, earning from jewelry products goes down in 2016 as compare to 2015. And it goes same for the textile
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response responds to the task only minimally and fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, stopping at just 103 words. While the student attempts to highlight some details from the visual data, such as petroleum products and jewelry, the information provided is very limited, partially inaccurate, and lacks a fully developed overview. Key features across the five categories are not systematically reported or compared, leading to a fragmented summary that only touches upon the prompt tangentially.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
Information and ideas are not arranged coherently. The response attempts some basic paragraphing, but the overall structure lacks a clear logical progression. Cohesive devices are very basic and repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'overall' and 'and', or entirely missing between sentences. The referencing of data and categories is unclear, causing the reader to struggle to follow which trends correspond to which specific years or products.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
Vocabulary use is basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling and word-form errors that strain the reader, such as 'eraning', 'eng goods', 'petrolium', and 'slightly' used instead of 'slight'. The range is limited to very simple terms like 'earning', 'products', and 'years', showing little ability to use less common lexical items or precise terminology suitable for an academic task report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response shows a very limited range of sentence structures, consisting mostly of simple and frequently faulty constructions. There are persistent errors in articles, verb forms, and subject-verb agreement, such as 'the bar chart shows, overall, the eraning...', 'dark grey colour represent...', and 'its rise to 65 billions'. Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic throughout the text, which detracts from readability.
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