Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
in above bar graph we get summary of exports of various categories of one country during the year 2015 and 2016. the graph shows the petroleum products are reached at approx $65 billion in 2015 and after one year it increases at approx $68 billion and next we seems engeneered goods, in 2015 it was approximately $58 billion and in 2016 it reached at $56.5 billion.
next, gems and jewellery. in year 2015 it shows export of approximately $52 billion and next year in 2016 it decreased at approx $47 billion then next product is agricultural products. in year 2015 the graph shows the export will approximately $42-43 billion and next year increased very few billion like $0.81 billion then 2015. next product is textiles, we show that in 2015 the export is approx $32 billion and in 2016 increased at $47 billion. now if copare boyh of the year's export of products the graph shows higher is petroleum products and lower is textile products.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response makes a minimal attempt to address the task by mentioning some of the export categories and figures from the chart. However, the data provided contains significant inaccuracies and misinterpretations when compared to the visual source. For instance, the figures cited for petroleum products and other categories do not accurately reflect the visual data, and the overview at the end is confused. The response lacks a clear, well-developed summary of the main trends and features, resulting in a partial and underdeveloped treatment of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response shows some basic organization by discussing categories sequentially, but there is no clear overall progression or logical structure. Paragraphing is absent, with the entire text presented as a single block of writing. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, and mechanical, relying heavily on basic linkers like 'next' and 'then'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information smoothly from one point to the next.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
Vocabulary use is basic, limited, and repetitive throughout the response, relying on simple terms such as 'exports', 'categories', 'products', and 'graph'. There are notable lexical and numerical confusion errors, such as misinterpreting percentage changes as absolute dollar amounts (e.g., '$0.81 billion'). While the language used is minimally adequate to convey the basic topic, the vocabulary range is constrained and restricted to elementary terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting primarily of simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex structures. There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and sentence boundaries, such as run-on sentences and missing capitalization ('in above bar graph', 'it increases', 'copare boyh'). These persistent errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader in parsing the intended meaning of the sentences.
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