Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar graph illustrates the importance of one country that delivered in multiple ranges in the 20s. The table displays the proportion of alteration in different categories compared 2016 with 2015.

Overall, Petrolleum had the highest export income. These incomes were increased over the time in 2016 in Engine goods, Gems and jewellery, Agricultural products and textile. Textile had the massive growth.

The petrolum products was nearly three quarter in the 2016 as comapred to the other products. The 2016 had showed a jumped gradually over the time in different product categories.

the textiles has increased

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the broad subject and include an overview that petroleum products earned the most and textiles showed the largest growth. However, the response reports very little of the chart accurately or specifically. The claim that petroleum was “nearly three quarter” is unclear and does not match the data: its 2016 value was about $63 billion, not three quarters of the total or of another category. You also say incomes increased in all four named categories, although gems and jewellery fell from about $43 billion to $41 billion; agricultural products were almost unchanged. The response is only 96 words, below the required 150, leaving the main comparisons and figures largely undeveloped. Include accurate values and explain the contrasting trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and further comments, and “Overall” signals a summary. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the body does not systematically compare the categories or distinguish the chart values from the percentage changes. The sentence “The 2016 had showed a jumped gradually over the time” is unclear, and the final fragment, “the textiles has increased,” adds no developed information. Build a clear sequence: introduce the visuals, summarise the main trends, then compare the categories with supporting figures. Use linking expressions only where they clarify those relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “export income,” “categories,” “growth” and “increased,” so the topic is recognisable. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or imprecise: “the importance of one country that delivered in multiple ranges in the 20s” does not clearly describe export earnings, while “proportion of alteration” is not a natural way to refer to percentage change. There are also spelling errors in “Petrolleum,” “petrolum” and “comapred,” and “Engine goods” is not the chart’s category name. These choices make several statements hard to interpret. Use the labels from the visual and precise terms such as “export value,” “rose” and “declined.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few different sentence forms, including an overview and a comparison using “as compared to,” but grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “These incomes were increased” uses an incorrect passive construction, and “The petrolum products was” has subject–verb disagreement. “The 2016 had showed a jumped” combines verb forms incorrectly, while “the textiles has increased” has agreement and tense problems and is left as an incomplete final point. Capitalisation is also inconsistent at the start of the final lines. Practise forming clear past-tense statements, such as “Textile exports increased,” and check that each sentence has a correctly matched subject and verb. More accurate simple sentences would improve clarity before adding complex structures.

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