Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the bar chart illustrates the export earning in billions of one country from 2015 to 2016.

Overall, peroleum products accounted for the highest value followed by the engineered goods, while gems and jewellery stood the third. However, textiles and agriculture products had the lowest value of exportation.

In 2015, petroleum products dominated the export earning with aproximatly 70 billions, while engineered goods reach roughly 65 billions, before increasing by 3% and 8.5% respectivly. while gems an jewellery saw a slight fall of 5.18% to reach 50 billions by 2016.

However, agriculture products levelled off at above 40 million, meanwhile textile rose wir

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s subject and give a broad ranking, noting petroleum products as the leading category and textiles and agriculture as lower earners. However, the response addresses the task only partially: it ends before reporting the full 2016 picture, and the overview does not clearly summarise the main changes. Several figures are substantially misread: petroleum was about $61 billion in 2015, not $70 billion, and gems and jewellery fell to about $41 billion, not $50 billion. Agriculture was around $31 billion, not above $40 million. The response also contains only 102 words, below the required 150. To improve, complete the comparison for every category, use the chart’s approximate values accurately, and state the key overall trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction, followed by an overview and then details. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, progression is weak because the final paragraph stops mid-sentence (“textile rose wir”), leaving the comparison unfinished and disrupting the flow. Linking words such as “Overall,” “while,” and “However” are used, but some are awkward or repetitive, and the relationship between details is not always clear. For example, the sentence beginning “In 2015” combines 2015 values with percentage changes without clearly separating the years. Use complete paragraphs and group the categories by trend, then connect each comparison clearly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “export earning,” “accounted for,” “dominated,” “slight fall,” and “levelled off.” These choices show an attempt to describe rankings and changes rather than simply list figures. However, the range is limited, and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors reduce precision: “exportation” is unnatural here, “agriculture products” is less suitable than “agricultural products,” and “peroleum,” “aproximatly,” and “respectivly” are misspelled. “Reach” is also used imprecisely when describing values. Build a more accurate set of terms for increases, decreases, and stable figures, and check spelling carefully so the reader can focus on the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a contrast with “while” and a sentence using “before increasing.” Some basic meaning is understandable, but grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “engineered goods reach roughly 65 billions” has a tense error and an incorrect plural construction; “while gems an jewellery saw” lacks a conjunction form, and the final clause is incomplete. The sentence beginning “In 2015” also makes the timing of the percentage changes unclear. Use past-tense verbs consistently for the historical data, write “$65 billion” rather than “65 billions,” and check that every sentence has a complete main clause. Shorter, accurate comparisons would help.

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