Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Introduction

This chart shows three different categories of one country during 2015 and 2016.And this table shows the ratio of each catagory in of exports in 2016 campared 2015.

Explanation

1 Petroleum products

In 2015 the earning of petroleum products was 6% but in 2016 it was incresed 3%.

2 Engineered goods

In 2015 the earning of engineered goods was 65 but in 2016 it was increesed 8.5.

3 Gems and jewellery

In 2015 the earning of gems and jewellery was 53% but in 2016 it was decresed 5.18%.

4 Agricultural products

In 2015 the earning of agriculture products was 42% but in 2016 it was increesed 0.81.

5 Textiles

In 2015 the earning of textiles was 38% but in 2016 it was increesed 15.24% and in 2016 te earning of textile was 53.54%.

Conclusion

During the time the earning of different cataguries changed petruleum products incresed 3% in 2016.Engeerer and goods incresed 3%.Gems and jewellery decreesed 5.18%.Agricultural products incresed 0.18%and Textile increesed 15.24%.this is the earning of different categories exports during 2015 and 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the chart and table and attempts to cover all five export categories, but the main figures are repeatedly misread, so the report only minimally conveys the information. For example, petroleum earnings are given as “6%” rather than about $61 billion in 2015, and the figures for engineered goods, gems and agricultural products are also inaccurate. The table’s percentage changes are sometimes reported, but the conclusion incorrectly says engineered goods rose by 3% and agriculture by 0.18%. There is no clear overview of the key pattern: petroleum products were the largest export, while textiles showed the strongest growth and gems declined. Focus on accurate values, units and directions, then summarise the most important comparisons rather than listing unsupported figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a recognisable introduction, a section for each category and a concluding paragraph, which gives it a basic overall structure. However, the numbered, isolated category entries make the report read like notes rather than a connected summary, and the conclusion largely repeats the list without drawing out the main trends. Connections between the chart values and the percentage changes are also unclear; for instance, “it was increased 3%” does not explain whether this refers to the value or the table’s change. Use a small number of well-organised paragraphs, group related trends, and use clear linking phrases to show comparisons and contrasts.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on “earning,” “increased” and “decreased.” Some task-related terms are present, such as “petroleum products” and “gems and jewellery,” but several choices are inaccurate or imprecise: “ratio” is not suitable for the table’s percentage changes, and “earning” is less natural than “export earnings” or “value.” Spelling errors such as “catagory,” “incresed,” “decreesed” and “petruleum” also weaken clarity. Build a more precise range for describing data, including terms such as “stood at,” “rose by,” “fell by” and “accounted for,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use a simple subject–verb pattern, and the repeated category labels help the reader identify the topic. However, grammatical control is weak and errors frequently affect clarity. Examples include “This chart shows three different categories … during 2015 and 2016.And this table,” where sentence boundaries and punctuation are faulty, and “the earning … was 6% but in 2016 it was increased 3%,” which has problems with article use, tense and verb construction. The response also shifts between singular and plural forms, as in “the earning of textile was.” Practise accurate past-tense reporting and patterns such as “earnings stood at…” and “the value increased by…,” while separating complete sentences with correct punctuation.

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