Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

According to the given information through table i can access the information which shows the clear results.

Petroleum products are increasing gradually and engineers goods also increasing but other three elements which is not increasing like petroleum and engineers.

As table results shows the textiles not growing or we say not in good progress. so gems bar is gradually increasing but it is also 2 steps back.

In 2015 engineers good was miner then petroleum. and if we see the progress it was increasing in 2026 and better then petroleum.

Moreover, Engineers goods and textiles grow is also grow in same number of margin.

Agriculture in 2015 and 2016 is almost same progress just .1% is increasing i this is not acceptable progress in export earning percentage.

Although, if we see gems bar in 2015 it was increasing but in 2016 it was decreasing 2% it was down 50% to 48% which is i think in lose.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify several relevant categories and attempt comparisons, including the rise in petroleum and engineered goods and the fall in gems and jewellery. However, the main features are often misreported or unclear: textiles rose from about $26 billion to $31 billion, rather than showing “not good progress,” and gems fell from about $43 billion to $41 billion, not from 50% to 48%. The statement that agriculture changed by “.1%” also conflicts with the table’s 0.81% increase. There is no clear, accurate overview of the overall pattern or the highest and lowest export values. To strengthen the response, summarise the key trends accurately first, then support them with selected figures and avoid unsupported judgements such as calling progress “not acceptable.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response includes some sequencing and linking, such as “Moreover” and “Although,” and it moves between export categories. However, the ideas are not arranged into a clear report structure: there is no distinct overview, and comparisons are scattered across the response. Several references are difficult to follow, including “it was also 2 steps back” and “if we see the progress,” because the category or comparison is not made explicit. Some connectors do not show a clear relationship between the ideas that follow them. Organise the response into an introduction, a concise overview, and paragraphs grouping increases and decreases. Use clear references such as “textile exports” rather than “it,” and connect each comparison directly to the relevant figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “increasing,” “decreasing,” “progress,” and “export earning,” and you attempt to describe change rather than simply list categories. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive: “engineers goods” is used for engineered goods, “miner” appears to mean lower, and “in lose” does not express a decline naturally. Phrases such as “2 steps back” and “not in good progress” are also imprecise for describing chart data. Aim for standard reporting expressions such as “rose to,” “remained stable,” “recorded a decline,” and “was the lowest category.” Check category names carefully and choose neutral language rather than subjective evaluations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, for example, “Although, if we see gems bar in 2015…” and “Agriculture in 2015 and 2016 is almost same progress…”. However, control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make the intended comparison hard to understand. Examples include missing or incorrect articles in “the textiles,” “gems bar,” and “almost same progress,” as well as tense and agreement problems in “Engineers goods and textiles grow is also grow.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also unreliable, particularly where a new sentence begins with a lower-case “so.” Practise building accurate comparison sentences with clear subjects and verbs, such as “Textile exports rose from…,” and check articles, verb forms, and punctuation before finishing.

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