Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the bar chart show that the value of one country's sell international trade in different categories during the years 2015 and 2016. The table illustrate the percentage change in each groups of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Overall, there have been many changes in export earnig from 2015 to 2016.the petroleum products has grow up to 60 in 2015 whereas that more increase more like 65 precent. engineered goods have been develop to 55 percentin 2015 and in 2016 that so enhance 60 pecent. but textiles has been lowest than petroleum products, engineered goods, gems and jewellery.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart and table and attempt an overview, but the response reports only a small part of the information and does not adequately summarise the main features. The overview says there were “many changes” without specifying the overall pattern, and the comparison that textiles were lowest is inaccurate: textiles were the lowest in 2015, but in 2016 they were level with agricultural products at about $31 billion. Several figures and trends are also misread: petroleum rose from about $61 billion to $63 billion, not to “65 percent,” and engineered goods increased from about $57 billion to $62 billion. Gems and jewellery declined, a key feature that is omitted. The response is also 52 words below the required minimum. Include the main categories, accurate comparisons, and the table’s percentage changes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction and an overview, and the categories are presented in a broadly understandable order. However, the response is very short and does not develop a clear progression through the chart and table. The second paragraph combines several comparisons in one run-on sequence, with “whereas,” “but,” and “and” not always showing the relationships clearly. The abrupt shift from petroleum to engineered goods and then textiles leaves important information unconnected. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and key details, and group the categories by whether their export values rose, fell, or remained stable. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise linking would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “table,” “percentage change,” “petroleum products,” and “gems and jewellery,” so the topic is recognisable. However, word choice and spelling are often inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “sell international trade” does not express export value, “export earnig” is misspelled, and “grow up” and “so enhance” are unsuitable for describing figures. “65 precent” also confuses a value with a percentage. Aim for accurate chart language such as “export earnings,” “increased to,” “rose by,” and “accounted for.” Check spelling and use the correct terms for amounts and percentage changes; this will make the limited comparisons much clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a comparison with “whereas” and a contrast introduced by “but.” However, grammatical control is inconsistent. Subject–verb agreement is faulty in “the bar chart show” and “the petroleum products has,” while the comparison “in 2016 that so enhance” lacks a clear subject and correctly formed verb. The sentence beginning “Overall” also runs into the next sentence without appropriate capitalisation or punctuation. Articles, plurals, and tense forms need more consistent control. Practise writing short, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb—for example, “Petroleum exports rose from about $61 billion in 2015 to $63 billion in 2016”—before combining comparisons into longer structures.

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