Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrates total exports of diffrent kind of categories between 2015 and 2016. The table display percentage change in per type of exports in 2016 in contrast to 2015.

Overall, Almost in every categories 2016 is ahead of 2015 means some categories are higher than 2015. and some sector are low compare to 2015. There are percentage change in values as well. Some categories show rise and some are downgraded as well.

Petroleum was make rose from 2015. Engineered goods also show grew in 2016. Gems and jewellary are the only things that not incresed. Agricultural products was slightly higher than 2016. Textiles climbed more than any other classes. which is noticeable jump.

on the other hand, There is percentage change as well. Petroleum products are gain 3%. only gems and jewellary is the only category which show decline in percentage value. all the other gt=et

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two visuals and mention several relevant trends, including the rise in textiles and the decline in gems and jewellery. However, the response only partially summarises the data: it gives almost no export values, omits most percentage figures, and does not clearly compare the categories. The overview is also contradictory: “Almost in every categories 2016 is ahead” is followed by unclear claims about categories being lower. Agricultural products are described as “slightly higher,” although the chart shows virtually no change (about $31 billion in both years); the table reports a 0.81% rise. The final sentence is unfinished, leaving the summary incomplete. The response is also three words below the required minimum. Include a clear overview and accurate key figures and comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an attempted overview, and two paragraphs about category trends and percentage changes. This gives the reader some sense of the response’s intended organisation. However, progression is weak because the same trends are repeated without a clear comparison, and the final paragraph ends abruptly with “all the other gt=et”. Linking is sometimes inaccurate or confusing: “on the other hand” does not introduce a clear contrast, while “as well” is repeated without showing how the information relates. The overview also mixes general claims with details rather than establishing the main pattern. Group the figures and percentage changes coherently, use clear transitions, and ensure every paragraph and sentence is complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, such as “exports,” “percentage change,” “decline,” and “climbed,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate, making parts difficult to understand. Examples include “diffrent kind of categories,” “was make rose,” “show grew,” and “all the other gt=et”; “downgraded” is also unsuitable for describing export values. Spelling errors such as “jewellary” and “incresed” further reduce precision. Aim for standard chart language and accurate collocations, for example, “rose from,” “increased by,” and “recorded a decline.” Check spelling and avoid informal or unclear expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, and the opening sentence communicates the general subject. However, grammatical control is weak: errors are frequent and sometimes obscure the intended meaning. For example, “The table display” has subject–verb disagreement, while “Petroleum was make rose” and “Engineered goods also show grew” have faulty verb forms. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, as in “Almost in every categories 2016 is ahead of 2015 means…” and the lowercase “on the other hand” after a paragraph break. Most sentences rely on basic patterns, with little accurate complex structure. Practise past-tense reporting and build clear sentences around a subject, verb, and comparison.

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