Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the given graph illustrates information about export earning between 2015 and 2016

overall it is clear that were significant diferences in the figures the hioghest value was recorded in 2016 while the lowest figure was seen in 2015 in addition the data show an overall increase/decrease during the period nolw looking at the details in petrolim products stood at 60 in year 2015 it was increase in 2016 stood at 65 at both between 3percent increase meanwhile engineered goods record 60 stood in 2016 and 55 in 2015 the values in [redacted phone] is 3percent show a noticeable difference between the to catogries next the gems and jewellery is stood in 50 in 2015 and 2016 but the percentage value is 5.18 percent fourth the agricutural products both year earnig become 40 and the percentage change in value is 0.84 percent now the textiles in 2015 stood in35 an d 2016 it stood in 40 but in both percentage value is 15.24

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the general subject and mention all five export categories, so the response is relevant to the task. However, the overview is unclear and does not accurately summarise the main pattern: the claim of “significant differences” and “an overall increase/decrease” is vague and internally unresolved. Several figures or changes are misreported: gems and jewellery fell from about 43 to 41 rather than remaining at 50, and agricultural exports were about 31 in both years, not 40. The percentage change for petroleum is also given as 3% after describing a rise from 60 to 65, which does not match the chart. Select the key overall trends—such as textiles’ strongest growth and gems’ decline—and check each figure against the visual before reporting it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a basic sequence through the categories, using markers such as “meanwhile,” “next,” and “fourth.” This gives the reader some sense of order. However, ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the opening overview does not provide a coherent summary of the data. Many details run together in one long sequence, with weak links between comparisons; for example, “the values in 2015-2016 is 3percent show a noticeable difference” is difficult to follow. Grouping the overview separately from the detailed comparisons, then using one sentence per category or a logical grouping of rising and falling figures, would make the progression clearer. Use linking words only where they accurately show the relationship between points.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “export earning,” “percentage change,” “recorded,” and “stood,” and the category names generally make the subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or repetitive, such as “the percentage value,” “earnig become,” and repeated use of “stood.” Spelling errors—including “diferences,” “hioghest,” “petrolim,” and “catogries”—also make the report less clear and less precise. Aim for accurate chart language and vary the verbs used to describe figures, while checking spelling of key terms. More precise expressions would help distinguish a value, a rise, a fall, and a percentage change.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to report comparisons and changes, but sentence structures are very limited and frequent grammatical errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning. For example, “it was increase in 2016 stood at 65” combines clauses without a clear grammatical relationship, while “the values in 2015-2016 is 3percent” has problems with agreement and sentence construction. Tense and verb forms are also inconsistent, as in “gems and jewellery is stood,” and punctuation is largely absent, making the long sequence difficult to parse. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use simple past forms consistently when describing the two years. Add full stops to separate each category’s comparison.

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