Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

THE BAR CHART ILLUSTRATES THE REVENUE GENERATED BY A SINGLE NATION FROM EXPORTING GOODS ACROSS DIFFERENT SECTORS IN 2015 AND 2016,WHILE THE TABULARE PROVIDE THE PERCENTAGES VARIATIONS FOR EACH CATEGORY OVER THE TWO-YEAR PERIOD.THE DATA IN BILLIONS.

OVERALL, IN CAN BE SEEN THAT,ALL FIVE SECTORS SIGNIFICANT DROPPED OVER THE PERIOD BETWEEN 2015 AND 2016,THE PETROLEU PRODUSTS WAS THE HIGHEST IN THE BOTH YEARS.WHEREAS THE LEAST WAS TEXTILES BUSINESS NOT MAKE UP A GOOD REVENUE IN 2015 AND 2016.WHILE THE

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 2.5

The response identifies the chart as export revenue across sectors and attempts an overview, but it does not accurately report the main trends. The claim that “all five sectors significantly dropped” is incorrect: petroleum products, engineered goods and textiles rose, agricultural products were almost unchanged, and only gems and jewellery fell. It correctly notes petroleum products were highest, but textiles were not the lowest in both years: agricultural products were higher than textiles in 2015, while both were about equal in 2016. No specific figures or meaningful category comparisons are provided, and the response ends mid-sentence. It is also 71 words below the required minimum. To improve, give a complete overview and support it with accurate values and comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introductory paragraph and an overview, and the opening sentence establishes what the visuals show. However, the ideas do not progress into a complete summary: the overview contains conflicting or inaccurate claims, and the final phrase, “WHILE THE,” is unfinished. The linking words “while” and “whereas” are used without completing clear comparisons, so they do not help the reader follow the information. There is no body paragraph to group and compare the categories. Use a clear sequence—introduction, overview, then one or two paragraphs comparing the figures—and make each linking expression connect complete, logically related ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “revenue,” “exporting goods,” “sectors,” and “percentages,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, several inaccurate or awkward choices reduce clarity, such as “the tabulare provide,” “significant dropped,” and “textiles business not make up a good revenue.” “The data in billions” is also an incomplete phrase rather than a clear description of the units. Spelling errors such as “petroleu” and “produsts” are noticeable, and the range is limited because the response does not use precise language for rises, falls, or stability. Practise accurate collocations such as “export earnings increased” and “remained stable,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a complex opening sentence, but grammatical control is weak and errors often make the intended relationships difficult to follow. For example, “the tabulare provide the percentages variations” has problems with sentence structure and plural forms, while “all five sectors significant dropped” lacks the correct adverb form. In “the petroleu produsts was the highest,” the subject and verb do not agree, and “in the both years” has an incorrect article pattern. The overview also runs several clauses together with commas, and the final “while the” clause is incomplete. Use shorter, complete sentences first, then add controlled comparisons; check subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence endings.

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