Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given bar chart elucidates information about export earnings ([redacted phone]).The chart compares different categories and presents the data in numbers or percentages.It can bee seen that there are noticeable differences among the categories shown in the chart.Petroleum products apear to be the highest,while textiles are the opposite of it.In addition,Some categories show some fluctuation by the following increament as well as decreament whereas for some cases they remain stable.According to the graph,The first main category petroleum products 65billions dollors in 2015 and 70billions earning in 2016.Engineered goods earn 60 billion dollor in 2015 and 65 billions dollors in 2016.Gems and jewellery products 52 billions dollor earn in 2015 and 50 billions dollor in 2016.Agricultureal products earns 40 billions dollors in 2015 and 41 billions dollors in 2016.Lets have a look at the remaining information,It is evident that the textiles has the value,at about 38 billions dollors in 2015 and 42 billions dollors in 2016.Furthermore,all provided data suggests that there is no stability in all the categories.Petroleum products was 3% high and engineering goods was 8.5% high gems and jewellery decreases 5.18%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s general subject and note that petroleum products are the leading category, while gems and jewellery decline. However, several reported figures conflict substantially with the visual: for example, petroleum is about $61 billion in 2015 and $63 billion in 2016, not $65 billion and $70 billion; textiles are about $26 billion and $31 billion, not $38 billion and $42 billion. The overview is also vague, and the claim that textiles are the lowest is not accurate for 2016, when agricultural products are approximately equal to it. You mention only three percentage changes and omit the key overall comparison that most categories rose. Select accurate key figures and summarise the main pattern clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response contains an opening, a broad overview and a sequence of category details, so the reader can recognise the intended comparison. However, the ideas do not progress cleanly: the overview is mixed with general statements, then the figures are presented in a long run-on passage, and the final sentence adds percentage changes without completing the comparison. Linking phrases such as “In addition,” “According to the graph,” and “Furthermore” are used, but they do not consistently clarify how the information relates. There are no clear paragraph breaks to separate the overview from the details. Organise the response into distinct paragraphs, group related categories, and use concise comparisons to guide the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “export earnings,” “categories,” “stable,” “increament,” and “decreament,” and attempt to describe rises and falls. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings reduce precision, such as “the opposite of it,” “was 3% high,” “dollors,” and “Agricultureal.” “Fluctuation” is also not a good fit for a simple year-to-year comparison, and “no stability in all the categories” is unclear when some values are nearly unchanged. Use accurate terms such as “increased,” “fell,” and “remained broadly stable,” and check spelling and collocations. More precise vocabulary would make the comparisons easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, for example, “Petroleum products appear to be the highest” and the sentence beginning “In addition.” However, the longer constructions are often difficult to follow because clauses are joined without reliable punctuation, and sentence boundaries are frequently missing. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement and verb forms, as in “the textiles has the value,” “Petroleum products was,” and “Gems and jewellery products … earn.” Capitalisation after full stops is inconsistent, and several sentences lack a clear grammatical structure. Aim for shorter, complete sentences first, then add controlled comparisons using forms such as “rose from … to …” and “fell by ….”

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