Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the export earning of a country by selling different kind of products between 2015 and 2016. In contrast, the table compares the changes the value of every products in the same period of time.

Notably, export earning from petrolium, engineered goods and textiles goods increased through out the period. On the other hand, petroleum products price rose to 8.5%, while gems price decreased about 5.18%.

At first, earning from petrolium product were 64 billion by 2015 and slight inreased in next year stand at 66 billion. Engineered goods followed the same trend in 2015 benefit from this sector was about 635 billion, but next year it rose to 66%, meanwhile gems and je

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart and table and attempt to report changes, but the response only partially covers the task. The overview says petroleum, engineered goods and textiles increased, yet it misstates the percentage changes: petroleum rose by 3%, while engineered goods rose by 8.5%; the claim that petroleum rose by 8.5% is inaccurate. The figures for petroleum and engineered goods are also misreported, and the response ends mid-sentence at “gems and je…”, leaving the remaining categories and comparisons unreported. There is no complete summary of the main features, such as textiles having the largest percentage increase and gems and jewellery declining. The response is 117 words, below the required 150. To improve, complete the report and accurately select the key trends and comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation: an opening sentence introduces both visuals, followed by a brief overview and an attempt to describe individual categories. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand” and “At first” show an effort to connect ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview contains a contradictory comparison, and the final sentence breaks off before completing the discussion. The report therefore lacks a clear, complete sequence through the categories, and some links do not accurately express the relationship between the information. Use separate paragraphs for the introduction, overview and key details, then group categories by whether they rose or fell. Complete each comparison and use precise connectors such as “whereas” or “by contrast” only when the data supports them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “bar chart”, “table”, “increased” and “decreased”, so the reader can recognise the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or awkward, including “export earning”, “different kind of products”, “petrolium” and “gems price”. These errors sometimes make the intended meaning less clear, particularly when discussing values versus prices. Spelling errors such as “inreased” and “through out” also reduce accuracy. Aim for standard chart-reporting collocations and distinguish export earnings from product prices. For example, describe a category’s “export value” or “earnings”, and say that it “rose by” a percentage rather than that its price rose.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentences, for example, “In contrast, the table compares…” and “Engineered goods followed the same trend…”. However, control is uneven, and errors in sentence structure and grammatical forms can make parts difficult to interpret. In “the changes the value of every products”, the noun phrase and plural form are not correctly constructed; “were 64 billion by 2015” also uses an unsuitable time expression and tense pattern. The long sentence beginning “Engineered goods followed…” joins several ideas without clear grammatical boundaries, and the final sentence is incomplete. Practise building accurate comparisons with a clear subject and verb, and check articles, agreement, tense and punctuation before combining clauses.

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